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Vanilla Lace

 

like being murdered by chocolate
hot and steamy
yummy
with vanilla lace-
sweet N devilish,
watching
sipping
like my favorite flavor on ice
sighing
these eyes wander today
and cannot resist her at play,
curves that my body does not have-
my mind screams out
for more words other than
hot and steamy
sweet N devilish
and yummy...

 

then she discovers me
when I moan
"vanilla insomnia"
that is a nice title for a poem-
sweet and devilish...

She whirls around,
"Oh, sweet and devilish, OK,
but your also forgot to mention…"
and left it for me to finish...

 

and suddenly
we are left alone for a while
I move in for the kill
or was I pushed?
or did she pull me in?
it was all a blur-
what was held back
was now unleashed
and you can imagine what happened next!

 

We are there
alone
on purpose together
our blood is flowing
fast and faster
tingling everywhere
minds dancing the waltz
bodies in tango
and I must come up with that other word...

 


OH!
OH!
this is not right,
we are both so... Innocent!
were
both so innocent...
The other word!
but oh so
yummy…
sweet and soft
hot and devilish..

can
I
keep
her?

 

 

 


 

Author notes

can I keep her- not said often enough!
for and inspired by my cherished AP greatgranddaughter- vinillalace...
Written August 13th, 2005

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  • AzureBlue gold member
    August 19, 2005
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    LOL...now I'm cracking up as well as smiling! Another hash mark for humor. Also for wit and intelligence...although I guess you have to have intelligence to have wit...so I guess I'm getting a bit redundant. Or boring...I don't know. I should just stop rambling and get on with it.

    Lorena


  • Porcelain Doll
    August 16, 2005
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    Ahh I had to come back and read this. And I caught another little something....

    "but your also forgot to mention…" (you rather than your.)

    'kie dokes...

    *goes back to browsing your poetry and basking in the rain of little yellow clappy dudes*

    ~Miss Porcelain


  • wbiro gold member
    August 16, 2005
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    OK, Ms. A, fixed, and I even improved on your tingles suggetion! 'we feel tingles everywhere' to 'tingles erupt everywhere'...
    much appreciation here that I won't forget!


  • wbiro gold member
    August 16, 2005
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    Thanks, Ms. Porcelain, you caught things no one else had yet, so an applause! Yes, these hot and passionate types are often mangled in the heat of the moment!!!
    for Amy!


  • Porcelain Doll
    August 16, 2005
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    Ahh this is just... ah! *jaw drops* Wow! Hot! lmao I found a few things I would change though... sorry *frowns*

    and cannot not resist her (get ris of the not?)

    for more words besides hot (for words other than hot? i just got caught on that line for some reason...)


    we feel tingles everywhere (the poem gives an impression of speeding up before that, and i think you should shorten the line to continue the impression. 'tingling everywhere', possibly? Just something that popped into my head... sorry -_-')


    Richt then. Ahh spicy! There we go. Stemy. Hot. Passionate. Luscious. Mrowr o.O *shushes self* Wonderful write. Certainly caught my attention... o.o *blinks* Yup...
    ~Amy/ Miss P

  • nolonger
    August 15, 2005
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    And how could I not keep reading this
    ~ vini ~

  • nolonger
    August 15, 2005
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    Damn near the best baby...but I must admit,, the first 3 were better

  • wbiro gold member
    August 14, 2005
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    ah, one hour ago! Was it good for you, too?

  • nolonger
    August 14, 2005
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    still

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    one more time before my shower

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    Panting? Im still sweating everywhere..er...yea
    Edited on Aug 13, 9:15 p.m. because ''.

  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    a belated applause! (panting still...)

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    see....and again...just cant stop

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    You growl Ill Puuurrrrr
    Lovely, tasteful hot sensual naughty, innocent sweet passionate ...so much more

  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    I agree, hotly and passionately! growllllll!!!


  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    Thank you, Kimberly, glad you're talking to me again, and only to find THIS! lol Will I ever be out of your doghouse??!!!
    but these girls are pulling love out of me that I've suppressed for... well, forever!
    so with lots of new-found and wild unbridled love, Wayne
    Edited on Aug 13, 8:53 p.m. because ''.

  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    Yes, Ayizan, the shame of it all! Innocence lost! lol


  • Scarlet Ambrosia
    August 13, 2005
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    Hello Dad,
    that was an intersting piece oyu wrote bout Vini ,
    I find it a facinating piece
    well done
    Angel


  • B Chandler
    August 13, 2005
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    tsk tsk tsk lol shame on u sug but im so glad u placed this in the erotica category but anyways this is really good but that innocent word i have to laugh at cause we all know that none of us are "innocent"....
    i know im not
    Rae


  • Touchof1der silver member
    August 13, 2005
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    Uhhh... okay! This is very interesting. It looks like a good time was had here. Repeatedly.
    ♥ Kimberly

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    Are you keeping count? I lost track

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    yes...yes it does.. so much more


  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    will go and read your poem, amazigh! and I hope you're feeling at home already in Mr. Vertigo's world! Oh, about the romance and structure- yes, true, but this has much more than just romance!!!
    Edited on Aug 13, 8:54 p.m. because ''.

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    walks in, reads sighs and leaves


  • Abdul T Alishtari
    August 13, 2005
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    thank you for the muse.





    Ode to Wibros On Vanilla Lace

    It is wow seeing
    your throes of ecstacy
    for passions with compassion
    are dreams so fashioned.

    I liked your stuff
    especially on the chocolate
    its smoothness and touch
    so thick, sweet, rough.

    Yeah, this was cool
    though its hot too
    more structure may enhance
    your feelings of romance.

    You may check my
    AM I Chocolate Pie
    though all advice risks
    your feelings ignoring this.

    -quick crit by AT Alishtari
    Edited on Aug 13, 12:46 because 'wive is not with'.


  • kkatie55
    August 13, 2005
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    Good

    lol so sweet and yummy ...you made me hungry for vanila my favorite ....with malt though ...lol....I was so cute ...made me happy ...peace


  • Marissa Ann Scott
    August 13, 2005
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    Lovely!

    "our minds do the waltz
    our bodies do the tango" is such a profoundly beautiful pair of lines! It implies that the mind cannot keep up with the passion of the body as the waltz is slower than the tango generally.

    I loved that image! This was quite a write!

    gypsybelle.

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    What ARE you doing here again? I Just love it so so much, I cant stay away, I dont think I have visited anyones page this much. I LOVE it
    And I'm an also


  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    Hey, I see you've been here three minutes ago again... hey, what am I doing here again... sigh!

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    .. Hmm. I feel wrong calling you grandfather here
    awsome awsome write, i cant stay away


  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    wooooooooooohoooooooooooooooo!
    HUGS happy happy joy joy hugs
    ................just some grandfatherly affection...............
    ................from a grandfather jumping up and down.............
    ...............and making a fool of himself....................!

  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    Oh, let me elaborate...

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    Very yummy,, been here ALOT today

  • wbiro gold member
    August 13, 2005
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    Yummy!

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    This is just too amazing, i cannot stop reading it I am just in a complete state of awe. Im glued here.

  • nolonger
    August 13, 2005
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    AWWWWW wow WOW, I im in awe, awe and shock, This is magnificent, wow, You just completly blew me away here, this is fantastic as i knew it would be
    Awsome write, and I should not be surprised at all, there was so so much said here, and alos,,, left alot to the imagination, great write through and through.the beggining was hot, sensual, then the end was just sweet, loveing..amazing

    "like being murdered by chocolate" Ohhhh I love that line, it just completly drew me in, made me want to taste more


    Then to make it even more tempting
    "like my favorite flavor on ice"
    Awesome.

    "we are left alone
    for a while
    I move in for the kill
    or was I pushed
    or did she pull me in"
    I think it was more I was drawn, and drew you an....
    Keep me
    always
    ~ vini ~
    excellent, Im pretty much speechless after reading it for the 4th time

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