My blood runs cold
at the thought of you.
The knowledge of what
my heart wants to do.
After all the bad
you've done I see.
Yet still you have
what belongs to me.
You took my world
far away.
And for that
I'll make you pay.
The light glints
upon the steel.
If nothing else
I'll make you feel.
All the pain
you left inside.
Tonight will be
the night you died.
No longer will
you be my foe.
No longer will
you see my woe.
Knowing now
what's in store.
Watching the blood
cross the floor.
Now, you see,
you'll taunt me no more.
Author notes
i know you want to touch me. i commented on pray.plead.cry.bleed.
Written August 13th, 2005
A contest entry
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Wow that was emotional. Nicely done. I really enjoyed this one in a way. Thanks for such an emotional write as this that you entered into the contest. Thanks and good luck.
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i would like to thank you very much for this entry into my contest and to wish you the very best of luck. viyanna rosemarie
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Great job on this one. I liked it a lot and enjoyed reading it. Thank you for entering.
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niice... this was pretty good. seems kinda haunting.
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WOW! This is a truly amazing write and it really touched me. I loved the rhyme in it and it flowed nicely. This is just a great piece all around. Great Write and Thank you for entering.
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I liked this, It is kind of one of those little muttered rhymes as we stomp along feeling the anger and trying to vent it in ways which prevent the actual bloodshed. Very dark and excellent write...well done!!
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Thanks so much for entering.
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i agree with shadowstalker, it does kinda seem like a chant. i like the very short couplets and the rhyme scheme is good. great job on this and good luck!
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This seemed like a little chant a person would say to themselves just to stay sane. Great job and you had a nice rhyme scheme going here. Also, thanx for entering my contest and I really do appreciate your entry.
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This is my favorite one of them all so far. This one is so dark and flows very very well. Keep up the great write.
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