If you only knew that the swing had a disease
That you would give flowers without a return
The star wishing was regretful
The lifting of your legs little boy
Eyes that would burn
Words that would need to be hidden behind
Stop wishing boy! Stop wishing!
The stars will tell you
They will never guide you
Shoot orders out to you
Do not touch yourself little boy
Remove that foot from the top of the brim
Never meant to be placed there
Turn yourself into a merry soldier
Roll around in the dirt
Take the shield and sword with you
The stars will combat against tall limbs that cower in the night
Welcome to the promised land little boy
Author notes
A poem to myself when I was younger. It is cryptic as that is a promise that I have kept to myself. This is my time to challenge myself and not be so streamlined as I grew up being, resigning myself to wishing on stars to get what I wanted. Turned out all wrong. Tony.
Written August 12th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Write a poem/letter to your younger self... by Daniela Violin.
300 points, ended August 23, 2005, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks for that montage. Tony.
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Stars can be friend or foe, but in the end we all know, there's some things we just gotta go through...slow. We use the angst in our lives as turning points for change and as anchors for never hurting others, depending on how much damage we have undergone. I suppose cruelest fate allows the obscurities in our lives to be used as weapons, rather than as friends...which is why we have war???
Peace Through Love.
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Prego bella Daniela. Tony.
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Thank you. Nice to meet you Vini. Tony.
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OMG, this made me tear up Tony... it's so beautiful and so sad, I'm so glad my contest inspired it. Grazie
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WOW, this is a wonderful poem, I felt this imensly, so much emotion pain and hate, nicely done. Loving it
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Thank you very much. Yeah I think that the stars are to blame for some things hehe. Tony.
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I love this piece Tony wow you have been inspired also today. i really love the title and all the beautiful and powerful imagery and symbols littered throughout. i really love the whole star thing.
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Thanks for getting this comment to me. It is the truth. Tony.
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Oh this made me sad. The abuses society puts on little boys instead of letting them just be!
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Thank you. Fantastic to hear from you again. Yes this is interesting. My wishing has turned into a little curse now. Something I can hide from. This piece is speaking to that boy. Tony.
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I think we all have wished apon a star sometime in our little life.....I don't think that is too wrong for a child to have a little spark of imagenation from the stars....I must say that you have done that challenge very well with your writings, so I think you did gain something from that little boy in you....great write....enjoyed this very much.
TUI
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