An old Cypress was standing in the woods,
when the flickering wind surrounded him
with leaps and waves, the wind danced,
and the old tall Cypress immobile remained.
His murky skin was dark already and,
all the Cypress moved was his sight,
and just by a mutter he could be heard.
A white Lily, shimmering in her whiteness,
rode the wind, spinning and wriggling,
facing the tall Cypress, lusting in delight,
up and down, left and right, unrestrained,
her perfume rousing the old Cypress awake.
The old Cypress tried to catch her,
but so motionless he was still,
that he could not fetch her…
The white Lily saw the unbending Cypress,
and his sensible prudence she desired,
but his thick skin she did not reached,
teasing him with her spiraling beam.
So, all could see, in the woods nearby:
The old Cypress and the white Lily,
resembling a dancer performing wildly,
unreachable, denied, before a vigilant king.
But the wind changed his mind,
As he constantly do ,and hasty he left…
And the poor Lily started to fall,
gradually far from the Cypress’s view…
In the woods they all gasped alarmed…
Then the wind returned and with a petty gust,
he threw the Lily sideways, and
she finally landed amid the Cypress’s roots.
The White Lily, tranquilly, rested,
her pale eyes she closed, and dreamed…
She dreamed to be an Old Cypress,
watching in glee a dancing Lily…
Author notes
May need final touches, Who knows...
Written August 12th, 2005
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No, Edna, you are correct there as Is Masterblaster...part o the last touches needed...thank you both.(And I have noticed something funny, in my computer the name of the archive is The Lily and the Cypress, not Lilly...)
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Nice job! Imagery is fantastic!! I never would have thought of combing a Lilly and Cypress, although I can envision them together. Good Luck!
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Beautiful work flows gracefuly this one has so mnay symbols and movement within the tale. nature is always beautiful to work with. I enjoyed this one.
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I liked the use of cypress and lily as masculine and feminine symbols...excellent pagan symbolism in this poem, but then the narrative didn't heighten enough for this reader to take it above its two dimensional confinement!
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I think you will find it is "lily", not "lilly". The latter is an old-fashioned girl's name. Nearly as old-fashioned as Edna, indeed. But what is reality?
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very beautiful
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Hi, and the poor lily started to fall, not fell, this is an enchanting write, I gather english is not your first languagebesides the few little hickups this is a delightful write, would like to see more of your work, all the best, hugs Di
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Of course they are metaphores
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nice tho
not my style, but I really see that you're able to write beatyful -
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I like your deatail.it works so nicely a lily and a cypress.Metaphores once again I supose but in another point of view it could be just nature but Im think about metaphores.Good Job <3
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