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Happy smiles stuck
In a vaccum of false hope
Sleep well pretty thing
Sleep well tonight

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Written August 12th, 2005

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  • nobodys-girl
    March 26, 2008
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    short but i love it! i love the last night, seems a little bit forshadowing...great write!


  • Leanna-bean
    March 15, 2008
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    I love this poem! Short poems are so sweet and to the point. This is a really good write

  • AmusedM
    October 16, 2005
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    I liked that! It was short and perfect.

  • GarbageCan
    August 12, 2005
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    hmm very sad.It seems to hold a grudge, and almost a torment? It seems to question what a person has to live for if they appear to have nothing. Filled in aworld of false hope, only putting on a smile everyday hoping for the better. The final lines make it sound like a night watcher, someone who tells them to sleep well even though that probably won't happen... well done!