arum spathe
glows incandescent
white and sinister -
but with beauty for all that -
in the half light
less a flower
than a waxen object
evoking coffins
in the sad-bereaved
and high-end florists
in the upwardly mobile
dark has fallen now
and it glows still
an almost ghostly green
tantalisingly shaped
this flower
a steely instrument
playing cool jazz
night is down now
and the arum is still
gloating and pellucid, viewed
from the safety of the kitchen window
later, much later,
I will sit and drift
outside in its come-hither
promise of the exotic
Author notes
Written August 11th, 2005
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Beautiful
You've taken me home. I'm sitting smelling the pungent, still air. Beautiful writing, words, atmosphere...Oh everything. Thanks (need to find more clappies)
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look up Cocoa rosie...they make a good sound track to some dis stuff. On note of poem, I liked it. pulls you through rather than bringing the focus to certain lines, which i like.
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Good
This is a really nice poem, i like the third stanza alot! Keep it up. -
thank you for your comments - i'm pleased you are impressed! I agree with you about the 'of' - you are absolutely right and i am going in to change it right away!! x chilli
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Very evocative
You capture the atmosphere very well, the slightly foreign whiteness of the lily outside and the complexity of its associations. I particularly enjoyed the contrasting meaning fr the recently bereaved and the upwardly mobile and the contrast between the warm indoors and the exoticism of the darkened garden. An adventure on the doorstep.
There is something very sensual about the ending. I can almost imagine the smell of the flower. -
thanx for responding so fast!! you have made critique on a friend of mine - the bee - just read it today. going off to read you now!! love to you, the hot one...!
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awesome work..nature is my personal fav. excellent job
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