~ Moving on ~
Just there beyond the closing door
Where time stands alone and still,
I will be off for a distant shore
Where you see me bidding farewell;
For I am moving on.
I’ve touched so many places,
Embraced the past and future,
Gazed with love on all your faces.
It’s been an amazing adventure
But now I’m moving on.
With the fragrance of all your love,
The tenderness of embraces,
With grace granted from up above,
I will carry your caresses
While I am moving on.
So hold with tender loving care
And celebrate the sense of awe
With the memories that we’ve shared.
For now its time that I withdraw;
As now, I must move on.
You are my pride, I love you all
If I forgot, please forgive me,
You’ve given more joy than I can recall
And I will be there,
waiting, across the sea.
But now it is time,
and I move on.
~r.
All rights reserved,
© Aug, 2005 R. Braley
(astralshepherd)
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~~~~~Janet Bolton~~~~~~~~~~
June 10, 1920 - Aug 2, 2005
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Written August 11th, 2005
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Brill
This is one of those poems that I'll be reading and find half-way through that I am holding my breath. The beauty and sadness...parting is so very painful, especially when there is no hope of a reunion in this life time...what a lovely way to say goodbye. This reads like lyrics- a sad and loving song that pulls at the heart and reminds us of how precious and very short this life is.
Lovely stuff!
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your comment is most welcome here and it means more to me than i could express right now...thank you so very much.
~r.
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Excellent piece; very enthralling and addictive. I sincerely could not stop reading. Every line was thoroughly enjoyed. The imagery was superb and really portrayed a clear, concise picture and sence to me as I read. It’s also a very relatable poem. The emotion is evident and grasping. Really liked it. Very appealing poem.
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Moving on not to the other side,but to another home after 18 years.Am happy to go as unlike this poet,I am tense and uncomforable about my present environment...A new beginning...
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Excellent
This is a wonderful poem describing what one thinks while passes over to the other side. I am touched by the beauty of the sentiment and flowing words. I just lost someone very dear to me and I think he too would have said those words. Thanks for writing it. -
awesome....i neaver would have thought of that poem out of that pic....
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Excellent
Excellent write, came from the hart. hope you will read a couple of mine.BISHOP -
I thought it was wonderful. I thought you had nice word choice and it just all flowed together very nicely. It was emotion filled and can easily be related too. I think everyone always feels that sometimes we need to move on but we just can't and this shows that you don't need to be afraid to move on when you feel you need too!
Keep Writing,
Heather -
inspired by love
Beautifully penned, and while I can feel the sadness, I also feel a sense of inspiration. A reminder that our loved ones live in our hearts and minds, until with open arms we welcome them and their touch again. Thank you for sharing... -
It's beautiful! i can feel the emotion coming through,
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Your poetry was quiet good and also expresses the reality with a poetic touch about life and death.
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this is an awesome poem!... it was just great!
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very nice poem. it was very sad, it was filled with emotion!!! nice job
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It is sad in a way, I usually don't like sad poems, but this one I do.
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This Was Really Great, It Flowed, It Spoke For Itself. It Moved Me, Excellent Write. Keep It Up.
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nice just nice
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I love this simply because of the happy attitude to it. Sorrow is useless here, moving on to other experiences in life should be a celebration because all the memories beforehand you will forever hold dear. This is fantastic.
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i love this soo much i dont noe wat to think of it .. weather its sad heartache or happinees wat eva it is i love good work
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This is beautiful and yet sad could feel the blessings and heartache within it. Sherry
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Awww. I love it. I t seems to make the memories of those in your past linger in a beautiful way. A way that you can remember the good times and that make sthere passing on or by all that much bettter. There are different ways you can see this poem though and its a great job. keep it up.
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The dates struck me, as my mother was born in 1920 and died in 2005. I feel like I understand. This is a comforting poem, gently rocking.
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This is so beautiful yet sad! There are so many people that have moved on..for most, it was there time...but for others, they could have had quite a few more years if only they had realized what they were leaving behind! For all of those that move on, I believe that this is their message to us! Great job on writing this! It is powerful and full of emotion...not only through the words, but when the readers look at it! Keep up the good work! I will put you on my favorites!
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8 stars
This actually brought tears to my eyess this is what true poetry is about- your words were so deep and the picture was perfect with the poem! I just absolutly loved it! -
I like the beat and the musical feel this poem generates...I agree with enjambment decisions and the imagery, but then at times have found some awkward phrases like "Where time stands alone and still"...time stands still (though heavily cliched) can work for the suggestive effect you want..."alone and still" is just kinda overkill! (though I may have missed a point or two)
Debashish -
in all utmost honesty in a way this is just somewhat similar to my poem write "Walk With Me" despite the words being different the message on both yours and my writes are identical to one another anyway i just love the ease and flowness of this write very much...keep up the good work
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A write that rivits the mind and tugs at the heart,
sad but such beautiful wording..
This stanza really spoke to me
I’ve touched so many places,
Embraced the past and the future,
Gazed with love on all your faces.
It’s been an amazing adventure
But now I’m moving on.
Im not sure if this poem was about Death.. but for me it kinda seemed like a thank you of sorts to the world and the people you were leaving behind in any case an amazing write
FrozenTears
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this is beautiful. it seems kinda bitter sweet to me... like the memories of these people and places you talk of are so wonderful that it will make all the sorrow of leaving be ok. thats just the way i took it, i could be completely wrong about the way you were going with this. beautiful write, and full of meaning! nice work!
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great poem. You show alot of feeling.
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Obviously I do not know the story behind this, but do I
really need to know.
I know it is a beautiful poem, soft and lingering, and
I know too that it achieves everything it sets out to do.
Death is a journey of arrival..
Blessed be ~ crisstiena
I QOUTE HER COMMENT.... IT SAYS IT ALL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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its beautiful. good jobies.
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Great job.Many people can relate to this poem in many different ways. awesome!! love it!! keep up the great work!
love,
lady luck -
Just a great piece, I really was moved by it, it's not my style but it kept me reading until it was done and then I read it again, fine work. -Al
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Beautiful
Beautiful, just breathe taking when you read this. I loved every line. It was a pleasure to read. Take care, Lissa -
touching
ok you know how to rip at the heart strings of a person. i have been through some simmilar things in my past and i cary the scars of loss on my heart too.... i just didnt expect to see it so profoundly put here today i guess i was unprepared for this beautiful and touching poem -
Obviously I do not know the story behind this, but do I
really need to know.
I know it is a beautiful poem, soft and lingering, and
I know too that it achieves everything it sets out to do.
Death is a journey of arrival..
Blessed be ~ crisstiena
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this poeming is g8t i hope 2 read more of ur work soon
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this is beautiful. I already sended you a comment but I have to send another.
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that was such a wonderful poem. i love how you put so much emotion into it. bravo!
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ill i can say is WOW that made a point in life!!!!
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Wonderful
That journey that we all must make at some point in our lives. So sad, and each stanza seems to take the author further and furthur away. T o make a journey where we cannot follow maybe just yet.The feeling of great loss and sadness ovewhelms the reader. For truly to leave all those behind that you know and love.Must be the hardest thing in life to come to terms with.
Brilliant wonderful,emotion of the last goodbye. -
I loved it. It was full of emotion.................................................................
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Touched
A most beautiful write, full of emotion and awe. Keep up the good writing! -
Hi, beautiful write, and I feel that even if you go abroard or wherever you go you will be back, you know you can't leave us, all the best and all the happiness in the world, a special hug, Di
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oh my gosh....so sad, and so well writen. i understand this poem completely, although unfortunately i was the person saying good-bye the person moving on. prolly one of the most depessing days of my life......i have a poem for it, called mom. so sad. anyway, very well done. captures the feelings perfectly, and decribes the scene quite well too. i'll have to read more of your work! good job!
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Beautiful work!
The whole concept of this poem is wonderful.
Thank you for writing this.
~Sarah
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sweet
this is really good oh wow i love it its amazing keep on writing its good -
With the fragrance of all your love,
The tenderness of embraces,
With grace granted from up above,
I will carry your caresses
While I am moving on. (omg i love it , keep pennin) -
speechless...
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Very good piece and very touching. keep up the good work
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This is a beautiful piece of work.I hope you are not really moving on because I am extremely touched by your poetry.GOOD CHOICE OF WORDS!!!!Keep in touch.
Sincerely
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i really like this. it has a sweet melancholy tone. it made me think of my Aunt Honey who was lost to breast cancer 3 years ago and still i'm not over it. thanks for writing this poem it brings alot of peace and comfort to my heart because i can hear my aunt whispering it in my ear right now. you did a good job with this and it deserves applause. comment on my work sometime. i would love your comment on my poem "are you cold?"
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A thousand thanks.
Ode to Astralshepherd's Moving On
By God Most Compassionate
your poem did resonate
remembrances of my aunt
who returned to fount.
Daisy racked with cancer
with no pain deferred
yet smiling she prayed
for us to stay.
Daisy cried from strain
but not from pain
begging take her words
whispered, each one heard.
Thank God for life
for suffering and strife
I praise God too
to carry you through.
by AT Alishtari- quick crit. -
I found this to be a truly amazing write, I enjoyed reading it very much, I hope to read more of your work in the near future if my time allows it, once again I love this piece, good luck on up and coming writes, and please have a wonderful day. cya later!!
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Moving to moving on has left the grace of simple feelings felt to me with depths of graciousness. Loss in any way shape or form, are things felt inside. Not always visible or expressed with such heartfelt agility. We all have our own deep thoughts contained inside us to shed. Lucky are those of us who can put these words to a form with magnificence in all its grandeur. My heart feels for those who keep inside the beauty they hold. For the world would never set eyes upon the wondrous feelings held within because they so lack the gift we share in a dominion of words. You are a wonderful writer I will profess to that my friend and sharing them with us makes you even more precious to the world…I remain
Malabu
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GREAT Job!
What a beautiful and well written piece about a life lived with love and transitioning with the same. Really enjoyed reading this piece. -
These two lines where my favorite...and really stood out to me...
With the fragrance of all your love,
The tenderness of embraces,
With grace granted from up above,
I will carry your caresses
While I am moving on.
So hold with tender loving care
And celebrate the sense of awe
At all the memories that we’ve shared.
For now its time that I withdraw;
As now, I must move on.
That was brilliantly put..keep writing ~Rush -
beautiful form for this poem. it fits very well accentuating the sentiment.
i see this as being about one who dies, moves away, goes to war... any type of departure.
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This is such a lovely write. I stand in total agreement...this is such a very thoughtful write. I think it is perfected as it lies now...you do not need to alter things which are perfect.
Liz -
Aspiring
Very thoughtful and full of passion, I loved it, I can only hope that one day i can write anything remotely as beutifull as this poem. Thank you for sharing. -
Very very beautifully written. I wouldn't change a thing, and thank you for sharing. ARSENIC-
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Beautifully written. Excelent job! I know how hard this is, and I know how you feel. Your poem is beautiful and inspired. You should feel really proud. Wonderfully done!
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this was a very emotinal pieace, it brought mousiter to my eyes, and yeah i can spell, anyway, it flowed alright, and the word choice was nearly flawless, the imagrey could have been slightly better, but you did a great job, im sorry for your loss and i hope you feel better, aandolin
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A very sad and emotional piece, this only makes it more beautiful. It captures a sadness and leaves room for life and hope. It is well crafted and has a great flow - well done. I especially enjoyed the stanza that begins : "With the fragrance of all your love..."
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Hmm. There are some nice ideas in your poem. I liked the ending because it kind of got me like 'are you really talking about a person?'. I like the thought provoking parts.
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Good
Very well done love to it's sad but peaceful my I have had a lot of people pass on and this gives passing on a little more peace of mind good work and good luck in all your writes and all you do in life -
Wow
This is so wounderful, I felt the love. I hope you remember this person you wrote of always. You have a tender heart keep it up! -
Good Work.
This was a really good poem. One can see that it has come straight from your heart. This poem is filled with emotion. It is very spontanious, yet carefully crafted. -
Very good write!
Kendra -
It's good, well done, it really drove the point home. Keep it up.
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Excellent
This poem is so beautiful and sweet and full of so many emotions. You left it flow smoothly and you brought tears to my eyes I am sorry for your loss. Take care and God bless. ~Angel~ -
excellent writing
Very beautifully written. I know you have felt a great loss and through this writing you are healing and as your poem is titled, moving on. It isn't easy to do. I lost my husband 10 years ago and it has taken me a very long time to move on. Thank you for sharing this poem. -
Well you have enought applaudes so I don't think that you need anymore, I will save mine for the more "needy"
but good write...keep up the great work.....
~That Lyrics Guy~
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Keep writing, this is a winner
When you suffer loss, it is hard to bear. You are moving on and looking back with wonder at what you had. Still you can move on!
Great write- Great background, I have looked at so many dark and hard to read so enjoyed your write and the flowers. -
This was the most amazing poem. I am currently bawling, and I can relate to it so well. I lost my brother a year ago in a week, and can just picture him reciting this poem. Beautiful. I'm so sorry for your loss, and yet I'm glad for you that you have some way to express yourself, it really does help
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This was very beautiful and lovely. A great write with so much expressed feeling and emotion. This was just lovely. Thank you for sharing it.
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First I send my prayers to you and yours in your time of loss. But I also send my applause to you for your strength that is appearent through this poem and for a poem that is well written in general.
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A buetifully written poem! Great job! -
inspirational
great poem
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Wonderful - moving on - as life flows - wonderful imagery; great emotion; very well done; reads very well. Thanks for sharing.
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Very Good
Simply very good. I have just left university and your work is very representative of what I feel. I like the fact that despite you know you will lose something important you continue. -
Beautiful... This poem was so sad to read, but it was like happy at the same time because it's like you are opening a new chapter and making for the best. This was just a great poem that touched great feelings. Well-written and enjoyed ver much!
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This is so very sad - yet so elegantly beautiful! There is so much emotion and compassion for those that are being left behind; and so much hope and love from he that is moving on. Very well written. Touching in such a wonderful sense! I liked this one alot!!
Best wishes! -
loss is never easy. but between the blink and tear and soft memories, there is comfort in knowing that someone is watching you
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this is so touching, you have a very expressive way of writing, and i am truly sorry for your loss.
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this is wonderful- made me think of my grand mother- thank you- sorry for yer loss!
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Excellent writing pattern!A soft and tender poem.Your writing shows no need for improvement.
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a gorgeous epitaph, thankyou so much for sharing.
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What a lovely poem! Sentiments of loss well written.
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sad and lovely
it hapeneps to all of us and that makes it sad but if there is one good thing he's in a better place and he can't be hurt -
Beautifully and thoughtfully penned with a tender hand. It's like you are saying a whispered goodbye. Very touching and eloquently done.
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Lovely
I'm sorry for your loss- I'll be praying you receive God's comfort while still remembering this.
It's a beautiful poem.
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