Go ahead, say you love me
Say you care
But we all know it’s not true
So obvious
You lie so often
You think I don’t know
And you pretend to see the truth
But you don’t and you’re wrong
Keep your lies
They intrigued me before
I used to question your motive
But I tire of it now
Just shut up
No one wants to hear you
Be real for a while
Just give it a try
Why do you try so hard?
To conceal the truth
It makes no difference
You are still oblivious
If you like, you can continue your charade
It doesn’t matter to me
You’ll just go insane, if you aren’t already
And it still I don’t care
Is it wrong, that you no longer have a meaning to me
You never did
You never even questioned right or wrong
All you ever did was try to deceive everyone
Well, nice going bunny
Great job raising two kids
Go ahead, call me stupid, put me down
But its still your fault
You played nice
You tried to conceal what you had convinced yourself of
You taught yourself a lie; that it’s all my fault
And now here we are
It must be a real wake-up call
To have lived like this for at least 19 years
God knows how you lived before he was born
And now I am telling you that all you lived by is fake
I sorta feel bad for you
To have to understand all this from your daughter of 12
What a pity
To live a lie
But it was your choice, to live like this
Not mine at all
And still you blame me
God I wish you could just understand
I feel like I am talking to a rock
Cold and heartless
Hard to break, all you know is lies
You can’t be human
All and all
I just came to say
That you’re a bunny
And I tire of your charade
Author notes
i wrote this and The Problem when my heart broke, when my world crashed. I found these and many other pieces like it in my old safe
Written August 9th, 2005
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This is a strongly voiced and well expressed poem, proving swear-words aren't needed to communicate powerful sentiments and experiences! I enjoyed reading this. It is very thought-provoking. However, the only thing I would suggest is moving the question mark from "Why do you try so hard?" To:
"Why do you try so hard
To conceal the truth (?)"
This is because where the question mark is at the moment, breaks-up the question in that verse, so it would be more effective on the next line. This was a great read!
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WOW, this is powerful. Nice job
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Deep, I like the style of it. You did this pretty deep. Hey all pain fades and all scars removed if you look for light in everything.
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This is a very powerful piece.
I can see that it was maybe written fron a young person's perspective, but I wonder if it is really appropriate in the Children's catagory?
Maybe you would consider a different catagory, since it is not really a childrens poem in the sense of Milne or Silverstein.
I will say again it is a powerful write.
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Ah, another strong piece. I like your writing style. Very fresh.
I think I'm going to add you to my favorites. Keep it up...
Good luck, always.
Aura
Rock on!
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