I hate it to be lost
in this never ending pain
I want to scream my lungs out
And die in anger,
*cut in every vein*
Chorus:
Forever night
Trapped in a fantasy
Cutting pleasures
Remind me of this bloody Sin
I want to be freed
Out of this hated life
I want to leave now
and die in blood,
*rely on the knife*
I want to fade away
And walk towards heaven, far to the end
I want to feel the angels Carry me
And die slowly in their hands
Chorus:
Forever night
Trapped in a fantasy
The knife has stopped
But the soul is still bleeding on…
Remember the fear
Remember the hate
Feel the pain
Drain out your fantasies
The knife has stopped
But the soul is still bleeding on…
Author notes
i've rewritten this, but i still don't feel sure about it...
wordchoice isn't good...i'm in an uncreative mood *grumps*
A contest entry
- Write a Song! by Natelystious.
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Ah, we do not have to ask life to kill us, for it does consume us as we live. This poem is full of feeling and I admire your writing very much!
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good job on it
very sad and powerful i............................. loved it keep it up ok!
~~~~~Nicki
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Very sad, sorrowful and lonely. I loved how you wrote it! Great job!
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oooooooo...very dark! it has good flow and its well written to!
sorry my comment is so short but hey being straight to the points a good thing right? Good piece blood tourniquet! -
wow thanks...
i still think it sucks but hey 
thank you!!!
you are just da bomb
~blessed be~
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No this don't suck, I think it was excellent, the rhyming was good, superb job
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