In Loving Memory
You left too soon.
You made a mark.
You caught the moon.
You were a lark.
You died too young.
You flew too high.
You sang your song.
You had to die.
You made us smile.
You made us glad.
But most of all,
you made us sad.
© Jim T. Henriksen
August 9th, 2005
Author notes
To a friend that died all too young of a drug overdose set on her while she slept! This is the truth, there were witnesses...
Written August 9th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Sad Poetry...make me cry... by luvmybabys.
300 points, ended November 11, 2005, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this may be a short poem but its so powerful. it almost made me crya ctually. and sorry to hear about your loss. keep on writing
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Hi, Ravenrae. I am so sorry to hear about your brother. I think those we love, but loose too soon, are with us in more than one way... Thank you for your comment, I appreciate it.
Jim
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My brother died in May he was hit while walking by a car-his head was hit and he lived for 5 days comatose. Before he got hit and died he was trying to clean meth out of his life. I don't know if he was saved from a worse fate or it just was his time. But I know that feeling of those left behind. Your poem was very sad. Good job conveying that sadness. Robinrae.
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Hi, luvmybabys! Thanks for the condolances...
Jim
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Very beautiful poem,I am so sorry for your loss,your poem is so short yet to the point,beautiful poem,good luck...luvmybabys...
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Yeah when the gov has a monopoly over the supply allowed to be tested, and they won't test different ways of dosing, then you KNOW something's not right. So many trials have been stopped, funding pulled, and researchers threatened over this it's ridiculous.
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Thanks, NeverGiveUp! Thanks for a VERY long comment. I am no advocate for legalizing drugs, even for medicinal reasons, but I agree that the gevernment(s) are too strict, not allowing the medicinal use of certain narcotic drugs to be tested out properly... Never give up!
Jim
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Simple, but in simplicity you've captured the emotions and grief very well. Only one mistake- You died to young should be "too"
So many drugs can be used to overdose (intentionally) or can be poisonous or harmful- many people mistakenly believe common things like Tylenol and aspirin are harmless and they are not. Yet they are legal, and even prescribed or recommended to people.
Yet there is one harmless "drug" a plant with miraculous capabilities that can help and heal and has for thousands of years yet this country made it illegal because of racism and other unrelated issues. So very sad,
Sorry to digress and rant, I'm just fed up with the situation and some of your poetry reminded me of this (like the spontaneous one- with the line "another day without a cure"- reminds me of people saying there's no cure for cancer but this plant actually can cure it).
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Thanks for the nice comment and the applause, suzeecue, I appreciate both.
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This is such a sad poem. Ive lost many people in my life,(My Father, friends, grandparents) and it never gets any easier. You have penned this perfectly
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Thank you for your vote of confidence, smileygurl. I hope it wins, too, but I'm merely hoping for a trophy.
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Thanks for the comment, princess. I will surely take a look at your poems, and maybe send an applause your way too...
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Oh my word! This is an awesome poem!! You are so gunna win this contest!! It's so sad! My eyes are watering!!
So much emotion. You are very talented!
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Wow, I really enjoyed this poem. I especially liked the rhyme that was flowing within the poem. It amkes you think why is life so short? I know I wonder that too sometimes. But don't worry, cause God is always on your side no matter what. And whoever it is that lost their life at an early age, they are in a better place You can trust me on that. I f I were you, I'll still taklk to whomever died. That way, he/or she will still be in your heart. Now, that's a fact. I really loved this poem. I think you deserve an applaud. Why don't you check on some of my poems and/or applaud some of them. Or maybe just one.
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lol
we will c lol.... good luck
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Thanks, Melisa. Hope it's a trophy winner...
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hmmmmm nice poem u shuld do well in this contest
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Thanks, Albus2, your words and your applause is heartwarming.
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This was sooooo good......straight from the heart. Well done.......Really soory about your friend.
You left too soon
You made a mark
You caught the moon
You were a lark
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Thanks for the comment, Quan Yin. Well, I can tell you this much; had I not been happily married, and a guy so faithful to his wife that other men would laugh and scorn me for my 'foolishness', I *might* have fallen in love with her... but as it were, we were just good friends.
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I wish I knew more of the story behind this poem. It is a concise and beautiful epiteth and made me wonder what more there was too know.
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Thanks, Silver Spirit. This was the best I managed to write when I heard of her death, because my eyes ran over with tears. I still cry a tear when thinking of what happened...
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A truely sad poem, but it's simple structure makes it all the more powerful. I hope your grief is not too long.
Silver Spirit x
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Thanks Buffy, your words are warming, as always. You have a big heart, and you're not afraid to let friends get inside it... I consider you my friend.
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Too bad this didn't win, though, then I'l dhave gold and silver both!
But seriously, thanks for the comment, Kuragari91.
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Tragically Beautiful!
Love this poem although it is so tragic and the line saying that you missed her was the most sad is very telling.Lovely flow and extremely touching! -
Aww! I really love this poem! It's so sad! Thank you so very much for following my rules and I'll make sure you get some kind of award. This poem touched me deeply! Great job!
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I must truely admit I have no idea what you mean with your comment. This poem was written in her honour, and I know she would have approved of it. I miss her!
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Ah, so she made you sad! but are you going to cast her memory down in dishonour?
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Thank you, sunny, for your heartwarming words. She was a good friend, and the loss was great... *sob*
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So Sweet!!!!!!!!
So sad and yet beautiful. I am sorry for the loss of your friend. It was so nice that you did this for her. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest with this. Joyce
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Thanks for the warming words, Kitsune08. Pray none of your friends ever dies this gruesome...
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Heartfelt.
This was a really touching poem. I've had friends messed up in drugs and always prayed that nothing like this heppened to them. I'm so sorry you went through that. -
I feel better now...
Thanks, Ashlee. I had tears in abundance when I wrote it... This is some years back, so I do feel better. I do believe the person who did this to her have been caught, but I can't say for sure. This girl was a regular guest at a bar I worked in before, and the one I wrote 'Chant of Strength' to... -
Oh my god! My eyes are filled with tears. I am so sorry you had to see something like this happen to a friend. Thats horrible. I hope you feel better. Just think of the good memories you have. good job!
Ashlee McEwen
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