fabulous feline
feminine fanciful
flirtatious femaleness
softly sensuous
silvery silken
softest sex
lurking in luminescence
looking in from the outside
she is in control
she waits for him
with hope
and love
Author notes
I adore this picture. This poem is an experiment for me in form.
Written August 8th, 2005
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Very nice write with some splendid imagery. A very interesting form you used with this as well, I don't think I've seen anything quite like it. Well done. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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Nice, Pictoral poetry, One thing thats hard to do. Especially when typing it. Though I think you could have made the letters a bit more.... uhmmmm... i can't find the word, but the "c" mostly doesn't jump out as much. I love your concept though, I truely think you've got a good chance, I love creativity.
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hmmm, very good. I like the structure of the piece, keeps the reader's attention and involved in the reading process. It has a very airy, laid-back feel, much like a cat. Well done.
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The eyes in that cat are human eyes. I see the "cat" within the poem. I had to read it a couple times, also. It definitely gets better the more you reread it.
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Actually the form had two purposes...one was to sort of tease the reader - like a "cat and mouse" game. The other purpose was to form the letters C A T with the white space but I don't think that worked too well. No one got it! Love 'ya lots - joanne
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Go, Joanne!!! The picture was so intriguing with those phenomenal eyes. I like what you have created-same letter adgectives grouped together. I wonder if the sharp divide in the sentences, actually the words stood for something or maybe it there intentionally to slow the reader down and pause to digest their meanings. I know that I liked this!
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This is really interesting, it fits really well with the picture. That picture is very unusual, by the way. I could definetly see myself sitting down and studying that for a while. Nicely done, keep up the good work!
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wow great job... i love how you laid it out ... thanks
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different
Very nice write Joanne!!!
Well this is a very different approach to poetry styles that I have not seen before, I like it. It represents the picture really nice and it flows nicely from one metaphor to the other. I love cats and this is quite the picture actually looks human. I admit I did have to read it a couple of times because of the way it is written. But I really love it keep trying things like this it is a refreshing change of style. BRAVO!!!! -
You're welcome!
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Oooooh! Incredibly intersting and while I was confused by the form for a while, a second look explained it. ^.^ Utterly amazing!
Bravo for an absolutely awesome write!
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Thank you thank you thank you for finding that typo!
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I can see the departure from your usual style! But I maintain that it's good to branch out every so often...
It's kinda creepy how human that cat is, or actually, how catlike that human is... But I guess that's the point of the poem! Great metaphor, if a bit established. 
Even though the metaphor is well-known, I like how this didn't feel cliche at all. In fact, the only suggestion I have for you is that I'm wondering if perhaps the word "faciful" is supposed to be "fanciful".
Great write! Keep it up!
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Damn! Now this is cool! I love it. The form is like a seduction itself. Very unique and quite clever. I can see such sensuality in this piece. Bravo! Gypsy
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i really like this poem
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