For My (then) AP Wife Torn Chakra
the songs are written- two versions even...
I just don't have a good recording yet!
Be patient, some of us have a steeper hill to climb than others...
Author notes
For my AP 'bride'!
and take a guess as to what her name is?
That's right- Torn Chakra! (you are so smart!)
Backdrop: Now Torn sang a song to me on Yahoo's IM, so I promised to sing one back to her... she might not remember, however, she was pretty schloshed at the time...!
So this song begins soft, slow, and romantic. Then gets stormy. Then mysterious. Then falls into despair. Then goes back to soft and romantic* just like my AP bride. So if you can imagine all that while you're reading...
It's simple because it's lyrics! Famous quote: "That which is too stupid to say is sung!"
Note: the 'they just don't make 'em like this anymore' line at the end is not part of the poem... I was thinking of the music! Maybe I could change it to 'like her anymore...' hmmm...
but I begged for a week to practice, it is a difficult piano piece... and I don't play that much anymore!
*what do you want from a song made from as instrumental... and all under 2 minutes!
Written August 8th, 2005
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I mean sesy (
) the font hurts to read so close, although it makes me hot
??? hmm.. maybe just cauz its your page
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hello, my hot and sassy grandaughter! (Oops, people can see this! the scandal!) By font darker do you mean lighter, as in a darker lighter, or do you mean darker darker, as in darker darker and not whiter, as in hotter? (oops, there I go again!
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Edited on Aug 14, 2:38 p.m. because ''. -
thanks for the comment on my 'Torn Chakra' piece, Di!
luv, dad!
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I like this one alot. i like how the lyrics spiral down and it plays softly,, I think the font could be darker.but other then that it was good, a great poet on here, and she deserved such a wonderful little song, as ans always you made it special, i had to comment again
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hey dad,
this was a wonderful piece oyu wrote forMommyJess,
I'm sure she oved it it alot!
this was well done !
Di
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Thanks, Suffering, glad you liked my bit of romance here! How it works- in many ways! Mine was a contest- looking for an AP hubby. (See how the girls have to do everything these days?!!!)
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Thanks ricochet for the insight- but you know what they say about lyrics- "that which is too stupid to say is sung!" (at least the music to this is complicated!)
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I liked: the innovation. I really like the mixture of graphics and text. Great idea.
I dislike: the novelty of this. Okay, so this is good for one read. Probably not for two. -
Aww congratulations...I didn't know Jess was your AP bride...how cute. I love the entire thing...I love the backdrop and the way it flows...it even LOOKS great...great job!
Sara
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What a sweet thing! Oh, how I love these romantic stories! ^.^ You two seem to have a lot going with each other, and it's such a lovely thing to know. Torn Chakra is a very lucky girl, that's for sure!
Best of wishes to you both!
~Saknika
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Ah yes but folks who know about chakra might see hidden thoughts behind this, It makes me kinda sad that is her name, Hopefully since she now has you, things will be better
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Wonderful! I love how it flows and it looks so cool! Congratulations with your AP bride Never understood how it worked but it is very nice!
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Such a sweet and beautiful tribute
and I really enjoyed the style and unique format you wrote this in.
Best of wishes always
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Very inventive Sir!
Cake are square...pi is round. -
Well, thank you, Ms. Dark! May you snare an AP hubby, too! lol actually I won a contest held for her seeking an AP hubby- where I had to write three letters to her then three AP daughters!
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Damn...it just wouldn't come off the featured box!!! Sorry...had to click it.
Aww this is beautiful! I'm glad Jess liked it, but I'd be quite shocked if she didn't.
I love the "format" of it...kof computer geek kof...but hell, I don't even know you. Well, not really.
It's so sweet of you to write this for her. I don't think I mind you that much. Good luck practicing! I bet she can't wait to hear you sing it.
Kate
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This is very nice and a great thought for your "bride", excellent show of affection. Even though this was different I still liked it and enjoyed it, The picture was great with the words on them. Great job and thank you for sharing it.
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Ooh, original. XD That's all I can say for this piece; original. I love how... how do I put this? How you formatted your poem into an image; ingenius (?) And it's sweet how you made it for your AP bride. XD Anyway, loved it, wish I had made it.
~Bishonenkoi
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Awwww, this is great. I'm glad Jess liked it.
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Well, Drake, I did consider how the girls were going to be jealous, but I failed to take into account how demanding that other gender is!
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this is sweet, you have to stop making the rest of us guys look bad...now we have to assasinate you.anyway, good write. -
A lucky lady she must be to have someone do something like this for her. I know she will be thrilled and realize how fortunate she is to have you. Best of luck in mending the tear.
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Excellent
Nice piece. Pretty neat how it was designed as well. I'm sure it would make a very beautiful song. Good job! -
This is so sweet and so well done. I hope you can somehow let us hear it with the music when it's done. Bravo - joanne
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GREAT WORK!!!!!
This is rather interesting and sad at the same time. Good work... -
Wow, this is wonderful! I reread it as you suggested, and I could almost hear the music in the background. It provokes alot of emotions, some unpleasant, others soothing... all in all, a very enjoyable piece. Thanks for sharing ^.^
~Amy
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Awwww thank you sweetheart! That's great; and you know me all too well! LOL! Great job! I can't wait to hear you sing this; I feel bad though because I can't write songs so you'll never hear anything I wrote! LOL! I need a songwriter to help me out I guess. LOL!
Hugs
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Thank you, granddaughter vinilla!
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This is absolutly F^cking fantabulous, my favorite lines being
"Longing
Yearning
Broken
Bleeding
Torn"
Sounds alot like me
This was an awesome write. I definatly was NOT expecting this, you have such an amazing gift, one I wish to inherite
Love ya Grandfather
Always
~ vini ~
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Awww... what a sweet thing to do for Jess. This is great!! What about your intern now??? I'm always left out in the cold.
I am sure Jess will love this. You are such a great friend.
♥ Kimberly
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