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He Waits

Alone he sits at night
Waiting
Thinking
Longing
For a woman to light  up his life

May she be the one to receive his kiss
The one to fill his empty arms
May she be the one to fulfill his desires
The one to release his passion

May she be the bringer of light
The  one to show him unconditional love
May she be the barer of his fantasies
The one to ignite his soul

So he waits each night
Wondering
Imagining
Hoping
For a woman to light up his life

May she be the one to hold his heart
The one in which he never parts
May she be the one to console him when sad
The one to share his laughs

May she be the one to wipe away his tears
The one to heal his wounded heart
May she be the one on which he leans
The one to forever fill his dreams


And each night he waits....

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Written August 8th, 2005

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  • Shepherdess
    December 19, 2005
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    brill

    A poem witch prevokes anticipation and a longing for an end to the waiting. well written
    great work!

  • quwip10
    August 15, 2005
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    Absolutely amazing, I swear you could be writing about me. Very good job. I loved this poem. You did such a good job expressing the longing. Excellent excellent job. The only thing I caught was in the line:
    "May she be the barer of his "
    I think you meant "bearer of his " Keep up the good work.

  • Moon Shadow
    August 14, 2005
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    Excellent Poem

    I loved the style of this write,full of sadness,but full of hope.I can relate in a way,but I would like back what I once had.Extremely well written poem,I hope many read it.Good luck in your contest.Take care Moon Shadow.


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    August 9, 2005
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    Even though I am not a man, this is one piece I can see myself in, even through his actions. I am the woman who is waiting, hoping, thinking about someone to fill my empty arms and lavish upon me his affections. Yet, that dream was snatched away from me years ago...and so far, is a wish left unfulfilled.

    I cannot say for the life of me how eerie this seems, that it describes my own life, except it's another person's story. The poem is beautiful. You should be getting many accolades for this.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • Sunkissedrose
    August 8, 2005
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    Yes very sad and lonesome, almost eerie in a sense. Excellent write as always. Would write more but got to split, kids are screaming.
    ~Carrie

  • Brokenpen
    August 8, 2005
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    this was great write .. lonsome write... i can relate.. but i've found my love... good luck..

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