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Killer of Dreams

Kneel down before me
The Killer of Dreams
Don’t look around you
It’s not what it seems
Don’t pray to god
I’m all that you need
Give me your hope now
I’ve taken your seed
Kneel down before me
The Killer of Dreams

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Written August 8th, 2005

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  • August 9, 2005
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    Deeply moving

    With hope and your own creation gone, dreams are shattered beyond recognition and impede you from starting over again... but only if you do let that evil power win and control your life. Great poem for one not used to write any dear!


  • Shadowspawn
    August 8, 2005
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    Thank all of you for the kind words. This is my first real try at poetry.


  • Shadowspawn
    August 8, 2005
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    Nope not about BJs.


  • SapphireStars
    August 8, 2005
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    I agree that you did kind of kill the poem at the last two lines, but nevertheless it was a great poem. Deep thoughts and a bit of mysterious darkness. I like it. ^-^

  • whiteshadowofnej
    August 8, 2005
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    haunting

    wow.... i mean, wow... so short n sweet... the domination of mind is very complete in the reader... it makes you feel as tho you are being taken... beautiful and so wonderfully dark... keep up the good work


  • shattered-dreams-xx
    August 8, 2005
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    this is REALLY good! i like it ALOT! its truly wonderful! great work! keep it up...its truly amazing!
    x0x <3 Casey x0x


  • PurpleBunny
    August 8, 2005
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    Is this about BJ's? If not... I'll get my coat...

  • XxbrokenspiritxX
    August 8, 2005
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    I love it! It's awesome! Good job!
    dawn

  • Murdering Raindrops
    August 8, 2005
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    Wow, I love it! Really great. You've managed to make it rhyme without sounding pathetic. Great job!

  • Molly Densmore silver member
    August 8, 2005
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    This was really an expressive write for commanding someone to kneel down at you. I didn't quite understand the meaning of it, but maybe I'm putting to much into it. Thanks for sharing it.


  • greeneyedmuse
    August 8, 2005
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    ooooo, gothic poetry! i love it. very terse, compelling, to the point and just plain fabulous. very, very good write. keep up the good work.
    ~sammy


  • Sot Helvete
    August 8, 2005
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    Good start, but needs more thought


  • Mousy Love
    August 8, 2005
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    This is great! Short, sweet, and simple. Very good!

  • Esperanza
    August 8, 2005
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    This is great! It is very simple and complex at the same time! I love it and I love the message it sends! Great poem, keep it up!


  • fae
    August 8, 2005
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    Play on words here. Killer of Dreams is both a thing, and a person. And in the end, you killed it and him I know you don't write much poetry but this is sublime. Course I could be biased... but I don't THINK so

  • OurxBeginning
    August 8, 2005
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    Wow this was good..very deep, keep it up

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