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Already Won


Time is ticking away

Tick-tock to the end of the day

You'll have to run straight home again

If you want to be there before the darkness sets in

And shadows spread across the land

Run before you too are captured by the Reaper's hand

Alas, it seems tonight that luck is not your friend

You've been held back far past your shift's end

The cold moons taunts you as it hangs in the sky

Though you try to ignore it as you run by

Your home is close; you're almost there

Too late! You're trapped in a devil's snare

Hidden shadows, your capture waited

And smiled as you were caught in the trap he created

Slowly he approaches, eyes glowing with hungry desire

His fangs plunge into you neck, setting your whole being on fire

But you fight, struggle and manage to pull away

And he lets you go, wanting to play

You run and run though you don't know where

But no matter what, he's always there

Watch and waiting as he licks his lips

Just a matter of time before you make that fatal slip

Suddenly you're backed into a corner with no place to run

This time you don’t bother to fight, knowing that he’s already won

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Written August 7th, 2005

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  • Padfoot-Black
    August 17, 2005
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    Have I already read this? It seems familiar... but oh well. It's still lovely.
    <3me


  • Krayzie
    August 7, 2005
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    Truly Dope

    You have great rhythem & Rhyme. I haven't read much of your stuff, but this is a wickedly DOPE one. I like it. And think it's worth book-marking!

    My Favorite Lines:
    Time is ticking away

    Tick-tock to the end of the day

    You'll have to run straight home again

    If you want to be there before the darkness sets in

    And shadows spread across the land

    Run before you too are captured by the Reaper's hand


    -ONE LUV, FROM A TRU THUGG! Krayzie Timon - Tha Youngest MC (oh and thankz 4 tha comments on me and my homie Soul Zero's Song!)


  • self inflicted
    August 7, 2005
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    that was wicked! i really enjoyed this poem, i like the way it keeps you on edge. the rythm and rhyme is brilliant, i especially liked the last line.
    thanks for your comment and applaud on my poem, kepp up the good work!
    sophie