I want to drive into you
like a bullet,
pushing flesh before me.
Your face is beautiful,
but your smile's wearing thin.
I've my finger on the triger,
dont dare me to pull it!
I've a need to satisfie.
I'de like to explode,
beneath your skin.
Its cramped inside my head.
My thoughts are bullets,
in a gun chamber.
Can they peirce you?
Fragment inside your mind?
If I could get inside you,
would I 'lead pellet' poisin you?
If I could penatrate
what do you supose I'de find?
Author notes
Written August 5th, 2005
A contest entry
- The Dark Side by MuddyKing.
300 points, ended August 6, 2005, 10 entries
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penetration and shooting here...skillfully used ambiguously...meaning that the speaker might want to have sex with the person he is addressing or literally shoot with a gun...or break the other person down verbally with his tongue - and that is also ambiguous. In this way the poem reflects a nice balance between Freud's eros and thanatos...the desire for death and the desire to procreate...
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