So many thoughts, this time I cant choose, do I write about death, or about how much I hate you? Do I write it like it's life, or write it since it's hell, come on now mother, so much secrets to tell.
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How long was it ago, that you gave me up, how much longer will it be, for you to realize ive had enough?
Contless minutes, now Ive went the wrong way, I cant stop myself, my life is starting to fade.
One, two, three, cuts on my wrist, questioning myself, how the hell did I end up like this?
So many things, now Im hiding from you, I hope you never find me, from the shit you put me through.
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The fear is in my eyes, my dreams will always bleed, the blood is in the floor, and so is my body.
The knife is in your hand, my eyes are rolled back in my head, my body becomes still, now I know Im dead.
I can no longer feel my pain, I can no longer be seen, now can I be heard, there is nothing left of me.
So there they go, the tears start falling down, straight from your eyes, when you layed me in the ground.
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They did a closed casket
Because I was brutally beatened and bruised
So I wrote this poem for you mother
About how much I hated you.
Author notes
Written August 5th, 2005
A contest entry
- Deep and Dark II by lovely lemon tree.
300 points, ended August 14, 2005, 8 entries
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wow. this was packed with emotion. i am sorry you have to feel this was. now for the critique! the format was interesting. i liked it! the font was difficult to read. i had to highlight it. not a big fan of cutting, as i said, but this was pretty good. good write! best of luck in this contest, and keep penning!
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**CRIES!!!!!** That was so sad!!! and i agree, the emotion in this is intense!! Great write and best wishes in the contest
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i loved this one, perfect display of emotion and imagery, i love the ending most of all, despite the fact that you broke the majority of the rules given, good write
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wow that is great so full of emotion, im so aazed that such beauty can come from something so brutal
wow
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