across horizons
spiraling up to heaven
afraid of no one
I am carried safe to Him
on eagles' wings I arrive
Author notes
"Ye have seen what I did unto the Egyptians, and how I bare you on eagles' wings, and brought you unto myself. " - Exodus 19:4
fyi...a tanka is form of Japanese poetry; the 1st and 3rd lines have five syllables and the 2nd, 4th, and 5th have seven syllables.
graphic taken from img.photobucket.com/albums/v224/loner89/eagle.jpg
Written August 4th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Write about your favorite animal by FloridaGatorQueen.
300 points, ended October 12, 2005, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is awesome. It is like the spirtual side of an animal. Keep up the awesome poetry!!! I will re-read this poem when judging begins.
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I hope one day to actually get my own photo of this beautiful bird. god bless you! - joanne
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this almost reads like a passage from Psalms..."we exault thee oh lord on high.." interesting form and rather concise imagery. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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Your most welcome
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Thank you so much my friend! - joanne
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Outstanding!
Wow! This is a very well done tanka. I like the beautiful thought behind it and your comments in the author's section were very nice to see its Biblical quote or what seems like the inspiration behind this write. My favourite line is L2. In this tanka, you have the syllable count down perfect. The Kaminshu {i.e., the upper part of the tanka or the first 2 lines} blends very well into the Shimonoku {i.e., the lower part of the tanka or the last 2 lines}. The Kaori or pivot point {the third line} connects the Kaminshu and Shimonoku beautifully. Each part of the tanka reads very well on its own and is very strongly brought together to make a beautiful tanka in 5 lines. All the best to you in the contest!
Charishma -
A wonderful poem, i dont do tanka's, i guess i should try them tho. Love yours. Love the sense of "overcoming" and rising above circumstances. I know Cheryl will adore this one and it sure looks like Gold to me. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard:
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peaceable
Hmmm...the meaning of syl-labels. The poem does carry a serious air of dignity and reverence. Caught the spirit of the contest perfectly, as far as I can tell. Nice pic! -
excellent
Wonderful write!!!!
There is so much meaning within this short and beautiful poem. It flows so nicely. Safety of being in His arms rings so clearly through. Good luck in the contest. Praise God!!!! BRAVO!!!!! -
Beautifully short and sweet. Plus I always love a good Christian write. It's inspiring me to try to write a tanka, too, but I usually just mess up those set-syllable types of poems. But I guess I should try, at least.
But I enjoyed this poem very much, congratulations on writing it. Good luck in the contest.
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This is an amazingly good Tanka. A beautiful image you made here. Also thanks for explaining the rules of a Tanka. Didn't know that. Now I can try this form once too. Great poem. Good luck in the contest.
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The wing span on an eagle is the most glorious of all birds that fly the firmament. I have often flown in my dreams and to this day wonder what that means. Your tanka is superb, and the photograph of the eagle is simply breathtaking. The best to you in this challenge.
Much Love,
Renee
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Nice write. Not much else to say. Your cheering section has hit all the high points.
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The poem was very well done, I really liked it. It actually reminded my of Gandalf in the Hobbit and Lord of the Rings. (Because he rides those giant eagles)
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A very poignant spiritual piece.
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this was a nice to the point spiritual piece. Eagles do wondersous representations and have so much meaning. good job.
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Hummmm...so simply put is the path to God. This is a good but, for me, deep.
~Lynn
P.S. thanks for the comment
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nice!
Neat. Simplistic, gets the point across, and nice picture that accompanies it to boot. I've never tried writing tanka, props for investigating interesting forms! I, myself, can hardly string together a creative sentence about birds, cheeping little things. -
very good, simple and beautiful.
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all is good
How impressive is this? Very good work, I must say. I have a soft spot for tanka. Glad that I stopped by to read this. This is very well done.
SirPort
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Ps you should write more of these
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Beautifuly written Joanne, and nice picture. Excellent write my friend.
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Pastor preached on Exodus 19 last Sunday and this verse has not left me all week. Indeed He does carry us on eagles wings unto himself. He is so faithful. Thank you so much, Vickie.
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What an inspirational poem and picture. I wish you could superimpose the words to actually fit right on the white part of the picture. They are so intricately intertwined.
I absolutely loved this, Joanne.
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