Limbs entwined,
glistening in darkness
Sweet euphoria
from animalistic need
Flesh torn
as passion heightens
Crimson dew
decorates their art
Growls, sighs
throughout the night
Moans and cries
create a symphony
Unmistakable lust
for love, for erotic torture
Memories branded
on each their own piece of art
Claims of flesh,
possession from passion
Marks of proof
across one another's flesh
Love unspoken;
violent, yet sensual
Passion driven
scars adorn silken skin
Tracing, relacing
memories unspoken, unforgotten
Smug lips curve;
kissing, tasting dried scarlet
Relive the sweet darkness;
the sweet fantasies of flesh
Uniting, tearing, biting, bleeding;
reliving passion forever burning
Author notes
I was thinking of Sharazon and Rose when I was writing this, of course. Also somewhat inspired by Almighty Aphrodite's poem, Bed Of Roses. Here's the link, in case you'd like to read it...Though it's very different from this poem.
allpoetry.com/poem/592068
Sharazon's copywright belongs to Opaque Beauty. Otherwise, it's clear that he belongs to Rose.
Written August 4th, 2005
In a list
- Erotica (Poetry) • next in list
- My Characters Along With Others • next in list
- The Sharazon Chronicles • next in list
What did you think
Comments
1 - 21 of 21
-
Hm, well, since you definitely seemed to like this one more, perhaps I will take out the first one.
As for it being rough? Well, it was rough lovemaking, you see, so of course the description would be rough.
Thank you for another lovely comment, and if you would like, I will remove the other entry.
Good luck with judging your contest.
-
ahhhh this was more like it. This is the way I like to read love-making. Soft, yet with fervour and hunger.
Claims of flesh,
possession from passion
Marks of proof
across one another's flesh
wow you talk about love bites here in such an artistic and sensual manner. Your descriptions are definetly rough but that just adds to the essence of your passion.
Well done...thanks again for entering my contest and good luck
note ive changed the rules and im allowing only 1 entry per person now because i was overwhelmed with the amount of entries ive received in just an hour. I'm allowing the existing entrants to leave their second poems for the moment...i'll get back to you incase theres any change
-
There's also a thing called imagination, my dear. Why would I want to give every detail away when the mind can work up so many images of its own?
-
This ahs a nice tone, but honestly it wasn't quite detailed enough o be involving for me. I don't mean I want graphic sex, I mean we have "Flesh torn, torture, Memories branded, Claims of flesh, Marks of proof, Tracing, relacing", etc. but never one sharp claw embedded deeply, never a curving point hooked and drawing closer.
I think love poems generally, and erotica absolutely, require a specificity of subject, something to make the personalities come alive and create an identification between the reader and the action. This is nicely done, but with as much time as you have invested in creating your character, you can make use of those details to make the much more vivid. You tell us the color of the blood (a couple times) but we know that already. What color is the flesh? What size the teeth? How deep is the moan? -
Thank you.
-
amazing
Well dark and beautiful, and extremely well written. I don't read too many poems like this, but I really liked it a lot. Excellent job!
-
We all want to be free at some point. I go free through online roleplaying.
Glad you liked it.
-
Intensely raw and passionate. Just the way I like it. Although a lot can be said for tender romance and seduction there's a part of me that wants to be free and uninhibited.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
Thank you.
-
Wow what more can I say than this...so very picture perfect...I can imagine two lovers in a heat of love and passion with your poem Bravo Bravo!
-
Glad you liked it. Good luck with judging.
-
Very passionate and intense. I loved your imagery..sheesh, is it getting hot in here os is that just me? Great job! Thank you for entering and good luck
-
This is beautiful... in showing that sometimes love isnt all love and sensuality, but can be animalistic and haunting... I love it
-
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
-
I like this very nice, and animal cravings of love, very nice description and vivid imaging your a good writer
Turttle -
You're not supposed to picture animals.
-
Wow. This is very nice. The descriptions are quite vivid though my mind couldn't settle on a particular set of animals. Anyway, it flows well and quie fitting to the two you have, at least from what you tell me.
-
Thank you!
I'm glad you could enjoy this.
-
Damn suga, this is definately spicey... It brings to mind fond memories... But we won't go there! This is some really excellent erotica; Normally I'm not a fan, but I enjoyed this piece . Spectacular job!
Always
-Kal -
Thank you for your lovely comment. My character, Rose, is into the animalistic sex. Myself, I'm not sure if I would be that wild, but I do like the idea of it. Anyway, you are a wonderful poet. Thank you for inspiring me to write a successful erotic piece after months of not writing. it.
-
I have never been able to write "dark" erotica, so I am glad for this as an example. I know someone who was into the primal, animalistic aspect of sex, so this would've appealed to him as well. Me personally, I'm not that wild. I am glad you found some sort of inspiration from my poem as well...to know that anything I say is good enough to spur others to create is truly an honor. And right now, I would love to do what the characters in this poem are doing. It's been too long...but I'm not going into that
Be well dear
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
Adding your comment:
1 - 21 of 21
8 old applause
