What chains shackle hopes to the joys of another,
But inure my soul to the state I would find?
What tear driven dreams bear the faith of no other?
Such shattered thoughts wrestle my bewildered mind.
Where feelings fortell what they cannot yet prove,
Though their rhythms and rules have long governed my soul:
So the chink in faith's armour could soon be removed
By a logic and reason more worn than the whole.
In putting forth this which I apprehend
As LOVE -- in a moment of self conceit,
Though the body of knowledge may all portend
A conclusion which predicates life's defeat ;
The fires of reason blaze scornfully bright :
So tempered, I wander out into your light...
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Written August 4th, 2005
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sonnets 1-10 certainly do exist (as well as many ones I haven't numbered yet because I can't decide the order). Check the list "The Sonnets" at the top of the page. Thanks for your remarks!
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That's pretty! That's a great rhyming scheme...and just a glorious, beautiful poem. You have a wonderful way with words...I'm going to certainly read Sonnets 1-10 (if they exist) because you amaze me with your words. I've never read a poem so deep with long words (that I barely understand) that actually fed me a new vocabulary like this one... Very very nice...
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That was a beautiful poem. Very nice use of words and the emtions came out of it. This was truely a great poem. Good luck in the contest.
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'...In putting forth that which I apprehend
As LOVE -- in this moment of my conceit,
Though the body of knowledge may thus portend
A conclusion which predicates life's defeat ;
The fires of reason blaze scornfully bright :
So tempered, I wander out into your light...'
Beautifully done...I'm kinda partial to Hope & Light...& my nickname is Wander...
Sooo...I like this one a lot...
& yes, that is how the Bob Dylan song goes...I believe Peter, Paul & Mary also recorded it, so you may, indeed, have gotten it through osmosis...well done & good luck... Wanda
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This is a very good poem and well thought out. your beat is good and immagry great. I can also feel the emotion. Thank you for entering ~calentice~
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I think I have heard that song... does it go "The answer my friend is blowin in the wind?"
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Really good poem davidz.......actually sonnet you said. I loved the last line-
So tempered, I wander out into your light...
The rhyming never looked forced. The flow was amazing. I was just wondering....have u heard the song "Blowin in the wind" by Bob Dylan. -
i love your passion in this piece.
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Very beautiful verse
and wording
best of luck in the contest
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Bravo, Bravo, Bravo!!!
Bravo!!! This was so wonderfully penned, I have chills after reading it. Powerful and filled with emotion it kept me hanging on its every word. I loved the K/A ending. "The fires of reason blazed scornfully bright:
So tempered, I wander out into your light..."
That was just the perfect ending to a poem filled with such vibrance. Thank you for sharing this with us and best of luck in the contest. Joyce
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A life is a poem.
So tempered, I wander out into your light...So it is the last and final hope to live with the practical truth of life. It is really a conclusive work to reach at the right point and right decesion of life too. The thoughts are really a travell of the internal to eternal results of life ..A life which deals love at its best too. The flow of the write is reallay communicaative too. I really appreciate this work.prabhudayal akhattar -
This is a very beautiful piece,in my eyes it is a (work of poetry),very beautiful,love the words it is very beautiful,I wish I could write like this,best of luck to you,and keep writing...luv...luvmybabys
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This is such a wonderful pice of work. way to get the reader attention. I love this piece so very much. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing it.
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This was such a pleasure to read. Your words have such a nice flow to them. I can see where this could actually be interpretted in a couple of different ways here whoch is always appealing. It gives the reader a little more freedom as well as the writer. Nice job! Good luck in your contest.
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excellent
A beautiful write!!!!
Your wording always is so impressive you are very talented writer. It flows extremely well. You paint a wonderful picture of love and testing of your faith. Good luck in this contest. Praise God always!!!! BRAVO!!!!!!! -
This was so wonderful. I thought it was beautiful and lovely and again you show your talents so masterfully. This is touching about love and you have expressed that so well in this. It is vivid and so well written. Great job as always. Thank you for sharing it.
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This write has a beautiful flow to it. Almost like it draws the reader through it. It is a capitvating piece. Well thought out, and structured. well done.
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I think "tear driven dreams" flows better x
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I'm a bit conflicted between "tear driven dreams" and "dream driven tears".... I switched it for now.. If you have any sense of a preference I would apreciate the feedback.
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I really like this. I like the same bit as 'zee1'... "tear driven dreams", it's just so good. Well done and good luck in my contest
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Your use of descriptive language is fantastic - "tear driven dreams" - wow. Beyond the beautiful words, this works well as apoem and leaves food for thought. I find it difficult to write within a given structure, something you have done well. I agree that the end packs the most powerful punch in this write. Well done
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this was good. and it does apply to whatever the person might compair it to. I didn't even realize it had a rhyming pattern until half way through the poem though. i think the last two lines are the best. very emotional, but then thats what the contest was looking for. anyway, good luck with the contest.
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This is a piece that makes one think I like that. gets the mind rolling to understand. your piece is one that is very strongly emotional or at least thats what I felt. great write Blessed Be ~calentice~
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Inspiring peice.
When dealing with love, faith in the other person is tested from time to time, I think that the light of love gives people reason to hope that they have what it takes to be with one another. Trust is the key. Two people that love one another hold the lock. Wonderfully written. Take care, Lissa -
This poem is not inspired by God, but by love. However it was written intentionally in a way so that it could apply to whatever
anyone seeks obtain against all reasonable odds. I believe the motif of entering the light and seeking the light is a poetic one. It appeals to our instincts as diurnal creatures.
The lines about the chink in faith's armour are intended to say 'my faith wavers, and even though reason and logic and stretched beyond credulity, it is with reason and logic that I hold my faith together.
reason and logic in this sense refer to dispassionate pragmatism.
Love is not practical. But to merely have faith is blind. When faith aligns with reason then the soul finds happiness.
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i love the allusion to the armor of God... yet spun in this fashion shows a whole new light on things... the disregrd for the pain at the end to love.... living for the moment... i did love this one... makes you think far more than most.... keep up the good work
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