Desktop Item
Background set
then I saved the pictures
to work on 'later'
which is much later then never,
or so I thought
I clicked on the zoom in button
I see you in it
In it
In The Van
Where we used to smoke
And argue about Soren, Sigmund and Neil
And fuck.
Sometimes, we just smoked.
Or argued.
Or do all three.
Sometimes, it was just about Sigmund.
We don't speak anymore, though.
Just a raised palm, pacified, along the corridor
A display of civility - stiff. But still there.
Maybe I'll write, 'Bugger Off,' on mine for next week.
Or, 'I might just kiss you,'
Or, 'Kiss me,' simply
Or 'I'm sorry,' (while we're at it)
I can hear the rain come down hard
with the same hardness you used on me in the van
And I start to remember
other things
Then I realise
The desktop,
It has no 'zoom in' button.
Author notes
perhaps for Kannika's contest
Written August 4th, 2005
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We don't speak anymore, though.
Just a raised palm, pacified, along the corridor
A display of civility - stiff. But still there.
hmmm...
civility-stiff
not to be emotional about it...
easy for the guy
but it takes helluva gutsiness for the girl
hmmm...
quite a story
but i love it parang isang indie film
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Excellent.
Hey. Very impressed and moved. I love the way a tiny image (viewed in a working context) prompts the stream of consciousness that is the working through of a work romance gone sour. The tiny image is mentally zoomed in on and your words take us through that on-going memory, that 'documentation', of the collision of work and pleasure.
I really like the use of the hands, now communicating only the mundane, to convey more intimate thoughts:-
Maybe I'll write, 'Bugger Off,' on mine for next week.
Or, 'I might just kiss you,'
Or, 'Kiss me,' simply
Or 'I'm sorry,' (while we're at it)
You finish the piece as you start. taking the reader back to the computer but with the imagery of rain (tears, cleansing?) and the sensual, hard, dichotomous driving passion(!) of tropical rainfall.
No zoom in button! Such a powerful love, that your heart should move your hands and head to perform the poetic equivalent!
Loved every phrase, Marc.xxx
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