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I Can't Save You

I can’t save you
Hold you close
I shouldn’t save you
Situation so morose

Looking in the mirror
I see you from behind
Your future’s getting clearer
Said fate seemingly maligned

You tremble at my touch
Tears running down my face
I feared as such
Final embrace

I can’t save you
Kiss your lips
I wouldn’t save you
Romanticized eclipse

You’re lying
Why don’t you get up?
Say it whilst I’m crying
Drinking from your death cup

I tremble at the sight
Tears running down my face
Only for tonight
Ultimate sin

I can’t save you
You’re beyond my reach
I couldn’t save you
Bids adieu to each

To tremble at the sound
Tears drying in my eyes
Silence newly found
Ending love

I can’t save you
Why should I?
I’d never save you
I see no reason why

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Written August 4th, 2005

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  • SixtySevenMustang
    August 4, 2005
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    thanks for clarifying.


  • KoruXShinobi
    August 4, 2005
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    O! Haha! This isn't really something that happened! This is actually lyrics for a song I'm putting in a new narrative of mine... Umm... But yeah, the person who couldn't be saved died. o.o Sorry for the confusion! (^^)


  • Nola-999
    August 4, 2005
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    AMAZING!

    wow! it's soo beautiful!

  • Lil Wolfie
    August 4, 2005
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    It's the awesome-ness!

    Wow. Another awesome song! And ain't you writing these up quickly? ^_^ Wonderful, emotional write, Dai. Keep up the great work!


  • SixtySevenMustang
    August 4, 2005
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    I thought it was good, though I'm a little confused. Did the person you couldnt save die, or did you go through a breakup or what? Im kinda confused.

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