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it's not fair

I cant do this,
you are tearing me apart,
two friendships bound in hate,
one of love,
one of fun,
you cant expect me to choose,
either way i lose.

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Written August 3rd, 2005

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  • Epona
    November 11, 2005
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    great write. its short but very concise- you say what you want in a few well-chosen words rather than rambling on irrelevantly for ages and ages, in a way that is direct and effective.
    E~


  • CJDenton
    August 29, 2005
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    stupid bunnies


  • CJDenton
    August 29, 2005
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    fuck a doodle doo you must be proud... oh fuck it why do the fucking swear words you put on transform to bunny, its so shit filled


  • Fortune
    August 28, 2005
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    no chris its not about you, you dont even know them

  • CJDenton
    August 28, 2005
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    its bout me int it, nm good stuff

  • Fortune
    August 8, 2005
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    you dont know them


  • Neon Highway
    August 4, 2005
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    who's dis about?

  • bymyself
    August 4, 2005
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    Wow I feel like this means allot to you. Though I think in all honesty you had more to say, this is good.

  • SixPennyGirl
    August 4, 2005
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    life aint fair i guess- im not sure who this is about but friendships r easily lost through love so just be careful

  • Neon Highway
    August 4, 2005
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    hmm.... Dunno who its for but ok then....

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