With her by my side I stand in pride,
synchronous stride together confide.
Together we walk, together relied
together in time, I'll make her my bride.
I can't get enough, her eyes, her smile.
The way she smells, her hair, her style.
Kick back, relax, and stay for a while
and I'll tell you a story and tempt YOU to smile.
Secure in our seats the movie began,
watching the trailers and holding her hand.
A slogan popped up, it could have been planned,
but what she said next, I couldn't withstand.
The funniest thing I'd heard in some time.
"Effective and Affordable", it said on the line.
She looked at me and pulled on her sweater,
"Effective, affordable, but I've had better!"
We paused for a second and I looked back in awe,
busted out laughing and started to fall.
Caught myself on the rim of the chair,
looked down to see if I had pissy underwear.
To my surprise I was dry as a beach
in the California sun and a sun dried peach.
It's a good thing though cause the movie just started,
and had I of farted, piss would've departed.
So there you go, one of the many.
I'd sacrifice all to the very last penny.
To make more stories even though I have plenty.
When it comes to my heart she is cognoscenti.
Author notes
Specially for this contest!
Written August 1st, 2005
A contest entry
- Rhymes (CONTEST) by Sharkbaitoolala.
400 points, ended August 4, 2005, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Lol.. So awesome! Original, in deed.. Good luck with the contest!
::still laughs::
PEACE FROG -
Wow, this is a very good poem. Very good poem. I liked every word of it. I liked this stanza...
I can't get enough, her eyes, her smile.
The way she smells, her hair, her style.
Kick back, relax, and stay for a while
and I'll tell you a story and tempt YOU to smile.
That was very beautiful, some parts made me laugh, but it's still cool. Good job and keep up the good work. -
I like how you told a story with this it was good. It is great to be in love and be happy. I liked the positiveness of this poem it was full of happiness and joy. You wrote a beautiful poem. Brilliant.
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A love is a poem.
Well when the matter is related with the feeling of love and love is in the state of joy and bliss with the life with her/his mate then the poetry and words starts doing magics and this magic can be seen in this write.The thoughts of this write belongs to a beautifull venture of lovely emotions and lovely feelings about life of the lovers.The flow of the write is verym musical.The rhyming parts enhances the poetic strength of the write.I really appreciate this work.prabhudayal khattar -
haha this was great i enojoyed reading this so much..thankx for putting a smile on my face..cheers
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'To my surprise I was dry as a beach
in the California sun and a sun dried peach.
It's a good thing though cause the movie just started,
and had I of farted, piss would've departed.'
This made me laugh beyond anything i've read
Nice job. And i loved all the wonderful rhyming!
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Lol. this was funny and good. I hope you win.
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Very good write you've got here. I enjoyed it. Keep it up, and good luck in the contest!
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Bwahahaha! Thanks for the comment! I tried to keep it humerous this time around. I figured you would be in need of a smile these days. I'm glad to hear that I succeeded! Have a tittin day and as usual, another kick ass contest!
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this is a very good writ i love it. it made me laugh. good write. keep up the good work. and good luck in the contest....
love sandra
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