No one great was human first
Nor love that bled for sinful thirst
Peace attained so recognized
For souls redeemed and circumcised.
Nothing pure as one’s own youth
Will ever match the Zion sleuth
slayed for what one can’t atone-
sacrifice that's not my own.
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Written July 31st, 2005
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excellent
Your words ring out with so much truth, we would never be able to atone for our sins, The sacrifice was not of a personal nature but he made it personal cause he made it for all sinners. That includes me!!
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The rhyming seems natural and the words seem to clamour to jump right into their proper places at your command. What a charming piece indeed, thank-you for a wonderful piece to read.
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Magnificent work, dearest Dianne. It is such a spiritual experience to visit your pages.
Love
Myra
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You showed your respect and love for god in this rhyming poem! I think that you did a great job at writing this! I saw a bit of imagery...of course, when I read, I always use my imagination to see what is going on!
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Well..thank you for qualifying it as such.You're gracious.
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(Psst . . . if I was still editing the AP Journal, I would have want to put this one in.)
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Brilliant poem, Cookie. You really wordsmithed this just right. The words come off clean and the rhyme scheme doesn't distract from the message . . . in fact it adds to it (which is hard to do), but most of all the message is just so excellent and it dominates everything else. Respectful cudos to you.
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Thank you for your read, critique and honest opinion.
If you will notice..the word first makes the difference. All humans were first on God's baker shelf, especially the Saviour.
And I appreciate your sweet reference for ....angels unaware That is a fact....and Biblically correct.
Did you know?
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I like the first line. Reminds me of a quote I once read, "Nothing human is foreign to me." Your poem is sort of opposite to that, saying that nothing totally human can be divine. I kind of disagree though--I've met many more angels in human form then the ones with wings on their backs.
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Amazing! :-) I love it. "Nor love that bled for sinful thirst..." Beautiful. You are an outstanding writer. Yes'm, indeed. Keep living for Him. :-)
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Thank you for your read, comment and kind reply. Yes..To know Him....is to Love Him.
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deep and meaningful
HHHMMMMMM..... i dont believe in any kinda of god but i am really fascinated with the love you have for "god" . and with this short poem i am intrigued with how you expressed so much with such little words. Very creative i think im a add it to my favorites. good job i will gladly applaud you on job well done -
NIcely done showing thatonce we the humans were gone and had no chance of going to Heaven for all of our sins. Then if anyone would die for all of our sins then the only person that could do it would be Christ. Very well done
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youth sees then time fades it
deep meaning here as youth its innocence and a Zion sacrifice, a paradox of peace and humanities struggle, this poem is a
whole metaphore in itself ,a riddle here also ,
very profound .The perfect sleuth found
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Please pray I draw closer to the Lord in my life Cookie and become more hungry for the things of him. (Thanks)
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Another beauty Cookie, I sure wish I had that love and passion for Christ of anointing you carry and reflect in your heart.
You are so precious just love God and have that relationship
of closeness.....Love you ♥
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