waiting at the airport,as time ticks away
my eyes are set at the swinging doors,
a hefty tall body is what I seek,
dark hair,deep brown eyes and a sweet smile
a nerve wreck you can call me,
but I just had to see him
and then came an end to my constant pleading and Impatience
he stood there in front of me,
we exchanged gazes,smiled and walked off hand in hand to another waiting room
the flight had been delayed... my parents met him and liked him
my big brother was being sulky,he never really liked him...
'The guy has the nerve to take my lil sister away'
- thoughts ran through his mind,his look said it all.
I walked him to his flight and surprisingly boarded it with him
but the nagging part was the flight wasn't taking off...
which made me feel annoyed...
there it ended...
- I am still waiting for the flight to take off already!!!
Author notes
Hmmm...Well it was a weird dream... and I seriously am still waiting for the darn plane to take off already!!
For the contest host -
I hope I have written according to your expectations,I am sorry I could'nt really turn into a complete prose,too used to the whole idea of poetry,I can't write without breaking the lines,but if you'd prefer any changes,feel free to tell me.
Written July 31st, 2005
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- Dreams by Bob the Elder.
300 points, ended September 17, 2005, 11 entries
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Fantastic job on this, it took me right there with you. Strong piece and well done
Good luck from the moderator staff, as we are judging this contest per policy, due to it not being judged on time. Blessings, Gypsy
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an intriguing write. i was tempted to comment on meaning, but it is a very open-ended write (which however felt important), an interesting aspect of dreams you captured nicely. the way this could be interpreted many ways, and then the question (part of the same) of whether it even has meaning at all... or is simply an irrelevant dream. it leaves the reader thinking. c
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This has the makings of a short story, my friend ... we gotta know what happens to Ms. Pi when she takes off into the future
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Please refrain from bashing this write also. It's an expression I use. Personal choice,don't question it. thank you.
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"God damn" Interesting phrase. Damned by God. If you believe in god, can u imagine a plane damned by God? The fate of passengers. We use the phrase so commonly, but have you ever thought of what it literally means?
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Technically a plane taking off means fast and good changes in life. A new direction or something... and this is something I have been waiting for a long time.. so yes I want the god damn plane to take off already!!
Anyways thanks for the comment.. seems no one else has a comment on this.. hmmm... -
Digging desires
I know exactly what it feels like to wait for the one you love. Waiting, waiting, waiting, tears in the eyes.... Frankly, I couldn't care whether the plane took of or not but I wish I had that moment where I would be with her, time frozen to an halt until I had enough just seeing her.
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