Hooded, black pearl eyes
unblinkingly look back with
the stare of ice cold indifference;
Cold, reflective gaze unwavering
in it's perusal.
Glazed ebony wings stretch, highlighting
the blue black haze of mystery that
surrounds this cloaked watcher.
Alone, it stands, fearlessly scrutinising
all that moves within it's vision;
Recording everything, missing nothing,
waiting.. ever watchful;
Streaking across the skies it resembles
a projectile, swift and sure deviating
neither left nor right, intent on it's
journey to alight with finesse, dignity.
Regal plummage unruffled it resumes
it's role as the watcher of all things.......
Author notes
My interpretation of a Raven.
Commented on: The Rain by Kuragari91 and In My Far Away Land by kkatie 55
Written July 31st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- A Unpredictable Ending To This Contest by countrybabe.
300 points, ended August 1, 2005, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks Matt
I'm glad you enjoyed it 
Many thanks for your comments, as always they are appreciated
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You paint a striking picture with your words. the repetition of cold and dark and uncaring got a little overpowering at times but I feel that it was, after all, applicable to the theme of the poem. I also enjoyed the cyclical nature of this with the bird resuming its watchful position. good write.
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Thank you Glad you enjoyed it
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wow this is so good I could feel the dignity of the bird as he flew the skies ...and watcher unto all ...smooth read...peace -
Close...A Raven, they used to guard the Tower Of London" Glad you enjoyed this Many thanks for your kind comments
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I love the description of the bird. Is the bird a crow? I love crows! This poem was very good! I also am not a fan of unrhymed poetry, but it doesn't bother me to read any of it. I love a challenge, even though in some poetry i have to read it more than once to get it. But in this case, it was easy to understand. Great write and keep up the great work!
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Not bad at all...you have done well in writing such a desciptive piece about a beautiful bird. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. Thank you for following the rules.
Countrybabe
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Thank you I enjoy very much writing about nature as it allows me to have free reign. Allowing myself into the role of my subject. Many thanks for your comments, as always they are appreciated
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Lol.. yes you could be right A secret diary! Now thats an interesting subject Many thanks my friend for your kindness.
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This was perfectly discriptive of such a keen intensive bird....you have captured all the movements beautifully, I love when poems are written with a more forceful verse, more of the free flowing of words, it just seems to be more true feelings as if you are just writing exactly what comes to mind....this was a great piece.....enjoyed it.
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Yes, it's Ms Cutie capturing her swooping friends again, lovely. --- If one were to step back a little your beautiful description could also be used to describe the inner secrets of an entry in a ladies diary. - Thank you.
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Thank you I am not good with rhyme so I am inclined to avoid it unless I am writing for children as the subject matter is normally less complicated. Many thanks for your comments, they are appreciated
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Two thumbs up
I’m not a big fan of unrhymed poetry but this I like. Just descriptive enough to catch my eye with out confusing the reader on what is happening. Very good poem indeed.
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