don't fall asleep tonight
unless you want to bleed
i come into your dreams
and i kill what i please
better yet, close your green eyes
so this nightmare can begin
welcome to my world now
you can't run and you can't hide
you've just moved onto Elm Street
and my claws are going inside
your parents tried to lie
tell you i was just a hoax
well let me ask you now
is this blade in your chest a joke
close your green eyes
it's time for this nightmare to begin
welcome to Prime Time bitch
you can't run and you can't hide
you've just moved onto Elm Street
and it's time for you to die
your screams can't save you
i'll give you a head start
just wait until i find you
and rip out your little heart
so close your eyes
and let this nightmare begin
welcome to my nightmare
try to run and try to hide
you've just moved onto Elm Street
and now your entrails spill outside
Author notes
Written July 31st, 2005
A contest entry
- HOW LYRICAL ARE YOU? by SecretMe15.
750 points, ended May 21, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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FREDDY IS MY F%#@ING HERO!!!!!!!
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STOP adding your lyrics to my contest. only ONE is aloud . PLEASE!!!! i get that your a great writer but please don't do that. leave room for the other fishes.
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Nice. I liked this a lot. The flow of it is really good. But just to let you know, you can only add one write into my contest. So please delete two of the three you added into my contest. Thank you.
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I really liked the connection to Elm Street. You expressed it clearly while adding your own style to it. Very nicly done. Love you brother, Angie
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V. nice, the first stanza is awesome!
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Great
this kicked ass!!!! Great job!!!
~*hopemarie*~ -
don't fall asleep tonight
unless you want to bleed
i come into your dreams
and i kill what i please
better yet, close your green eyes
so this nightmare can begin
I love this first stanza, Your write is chilling and scary and so very dark. You have accomplished that well. This was so well written by your talent that shows through. Great job and thank you for sharing it. -
Hmm... I found the combination of Elm St. with the story a bit artificial... it sounds crafted, not really natural. There are terrifying elements without real substantiation... That's my impression... others may judge differently. Maybe it is because I am not that much into Nightmare on Elm Street. And what is 1428?
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I liked: that you created a clear communicable story here. It is very easy for me to decipher what is going on. Anyone should be able to do the same.
I disliked: the limitations of fanfic as a whole. I realize this is a derivative work on a horror franchise. In my opinion, fanfic can never be as good as an original story.
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