Your flagrant rhetoric...defecation
Pestilence upon me...irritation
Apology long overdue...condemnation
Piteous creature you become...damnation
The scarring residue...permanent
Unsuspecting vengeance comes...imminent
Verbal seething loathing...disarmament
Double edged sword...embitterment
The cutting edges...desecration
No prisoner rule...decimation
Your monster, yes...creation
Your word game match and checkmate...annihilation
~Nikki~
Author notes
Yes , the artwork is my own and titled Backside . This is about turning the tables on someone who tried to make me feel inferior. It also is a form I created and call The Warped Mirror Both the lines and singular words tell the same tale, the lines for those who like a bit of reading depth and the singular words for those who like concise, to the point.
Never have a battle of verbality, wits with someone else, unless you are sure they are unarmed! 
Written July 31st, 2005
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A contest entry
- Jealousy....hate.....sadness...... or how someone is or has tried to screw up your life me by strawberrie2005.
350 points, ended August 16, 2005, 18 entries
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Awesome poem...your choice of words are superb....because of this choice you have conveyed a wealth of emotions and imagery. Right from the begginning I had a sense of vindictiveness. I love your new style...very interesting....intriguing...too complicated for me at this hour but I love it....
keep up the great work and I'll be back to read more when I have the time.
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different things come to mind..." revenge is best served up cpld' or " the pen is mightier than the sword" Always been a believer to get them back with wit rather than fists
Great examole of that and best wishes fir the contest,
Reenie
Reenie
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Haha... um.. that poem lost me a little thanks for sharing keep up the good work!
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Brilliant! It seethes venom and does it so very awesomely. I love it hun! Woot! You go! Hugs, Gypsy
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omg wow! that was so good!
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yay!!!
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I loved the structure of this- the layout looks like a hat too! I tip my hat to you on that one!
good balance and an excellent parallel between chess, the art of war and tactical annihilation 
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Love the picture and I would like the poem except for the misuse of the ellipsis. This reads almost like a rant which, I do like rants.
Over all nice piece.
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I liked: that you were attempting to write within a certain framework. I believe this is a good thing -- and will only extend your writing abilities. I encourage you do keep challenging yourself.
I disliked: how it seems this poem exists merely for you to rhyme. Now, I am fine with writing exercises. But in a sense of having me enjoy this poem, it is hard for me to enjoy it if you make it so blatantly obvious that you are trying to rhyme. -
Wow! I love this! It's so kewl! I love the extended vocabulary! It's very kewl! I love this, I applaud you!
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Ah, sweet vengeance. I appreciate what this poem is about, though I am more the type of person who cannot think of a comeback for their life. Until the person who insults me has left. Then I can think of many. I hate when that happens. Anyway, Im glad that you have the mental fortitude to dish out what you receive and then some. Great poem.
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