1. Thundering down,
Each drop hitting the ground,
Individually,
In its own time,
Making an impact
The sun sets,
Unable to be seen,
Through the cover of clouds
That float across the sky.
2. Thundering down,
Each drop hits the ground.
Making a sound,
That will be drowned,
By the next pound,
On the ground.
3. Thundering down,
Each drop hitting the ground
Individually,
In it's own time,
Making a sound,
That will be drowned
The sun sets,
Unable to be seen
From the ground
Because of the cover of clouds,
That will someday pound to the ground
Author notes
This is a poem that I wrote in a writing class at camp this summer. It is basically three poems: one the original poem, the next inspired by the original, but not the same, and the third a combination of the other two. The repetition is therefore intentional
Written July 12th, 2005
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thank you. i decided to separate with numbers because the numbers represent the order that the poems where written in.
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good work
i love the repetitive, rhyming verses. You showed incredible feeling and i think this is very well written. one suggestion...
you may want to separate your verses in a way some other than numbers, which dont seem fit for this poem. -
thank you so much
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I loved it..I really love the nature..keep writing.
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