It's midnight in my bedroom and
you're sleeping somewhere else like
you don't know I'm waiting for you
pleading with you, needing you to
look under the covers
touch me back
me up against the wall and
kiss me kiss
me kiss
me
Author notes
Ah, my muse! I owe many, many poems to his loveliness.
Written July 30th, 2005
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Poems like this can only be understood, when someone has felt a love like that, where the constant need for touching is almost an addiction and proof of the love that two people shared. This poem really conveys a lot more than you think it does.
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I hadn't even noticed that it looks a bit like a heart! It wasn't intentional at all. Serious props to you for catching that.
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That's perfectly fine, I can't expect everyone to like my work. I do greatly appriciate that you bothered to leave a comment at all, since it wasn't to your liking. Thank you for your opinion!
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hey this ones intense now i wonder if there is a hidden meanin or if its one of those so obvious u won't ever get it?
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awesome write
hey this was well done. i liked it... well i love love poems.. this was a lonley but wnating one great job. thank you for sharing your words wiith me. -
Sorry to be against what most people are saying but this really doesn't speak to me, then again thats just my personale opinion and as you can see from all the people here not any people share it...
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were you intending to write this in a concrete poem format? the outline of your words almost resemble a heart form to me.
if so, you may want to work it a little by double-spacing between the "in" and the "my" in the first line. also little adjustments to line breaks from L6 down would be required...
But enough of the art of the poem...as a poem, it's a pretty good write. your style obviously i influenced by other writers whom you have read, and it seems you are learning very well from them. hope i have the chance to read more of you!
Jo -
Awww..Great!..
I like the short style very much. The poem is somewhat arousing to me, I truly liked it. (Check my "The Crush", if you'd like)... -
wow
1.i love the bakround
2.soooo sweet poem
3.its so short yet soooooo good!
and
4.you are AMAZING!!!!!!!!!
great write
keep it up!
much luv,
aby -
My muse is always on call. I just love him!
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Yes, and most especially when they have another's company. Makes me sad.
But anyway, thanks!
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Aww
Awwwwwwww. This is so sweet; I can clearly feel all the sentiment put into this... your muse must be doing his job? -
great work
short and comfy, I like it. -
Tough to sleep when your special someone is somewhere else - by themselves or with someone else - doesn't say. Nice write.
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Suppose muses are an important part of being a poet. They can be a real pest when your trying to sleep though. All in all a lovely sentiment.
Peace,
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It's pretty cool, very romantic. -
I really liked that. The feeling that you put into it came across very well and the subject is interesting. I also rather liked the odd format!
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