I stare into space
time can't erase
your face..your face
I close my eyes
I feel your thighs
pressed tightly round me
I hear your sighs..your sighs
I can't escape
the spell you've cast upon me
I miss your perfume on me
it lingers in my mind...
I can't not think of you
when all I want to do
is be so close to you
I can't breathe
I can't not see your smile
it's with me all the while
I can't not cry without you
I can't not die without you
I can't get along without you...
I can't write this song without...
you
Author notes
Inspired by "The Blower's Daughter", a hauntingly beautiful song written and sung by Damien Rice.
Here are the original lyrics:
And so it is
Just like you said it would be
Life goes easy on me
Most of the time
And so it is
The shorter story
No love, no glory
No hero in her skies
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes...
And so it is
Just like you said it should be
We'll both forget the breeze
Most of the time
And so it is
The colder water
The blower's daughter
The pupil in denial
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes off you
I can't take my eyes...
Did I say that I loathe you?
Did I say that I want to
Leave it all behind?
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind off you...
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind off you
I can't take my mind...
My mind...my mind...
'Til I find somebody new
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If you click on this link, you will be able to see the video and hear "The Blower's Daughter":
www.mp3.com/tracks/4544684/dl_streams.html
Enjoy!
Written July 30th, 2005
A contest entry
- I can't stop thinking about you ... - CONTEST by Harlequin Bunny.
350 points, ended December 20, 2005, 26 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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I like how your poem echoes the sentiments expressed in the song. Thanks for entering the contest. Good luck.
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Thank you, Cris!
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This is a great write!! Very well done...it could just be me and how i read poems but the image that was in my head was amazing as is this poem!
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Now, this is the sort of thing I was hoping I'd get when I started this contest .. beautiful, original, and sticking to the subject matter I asked for!! Thanks for entering!
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It's wonderful when songs are an inspiration to us, and you did a superb job with this one Maureen... beautifully inspiring!!!!
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Thank you for your nice comment, rose. It was nice hearing from you..hope you enjoyed "The Blower's Daughter".
Maureen
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Surely hope you win the contest. Your words catch the heart and soul of this poor poet. Loved to read this melody and I shall click on the link to hear the song suggested. Thanks for adding to my piece, as well. Much appreciated. rose
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Thank you, Eddy!
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Sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet........
Hugs...Eddy -
that bit of romance touches withose breeze gently felt one moment at a time!
I did enjoy this!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
G'DAY my soul sister, I thought I commented on this. It's a beautiful piece that does make you want to sing a long to it. Very lyrical and very romantic sounding
Hugs Joan
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It does read like a song. It conveys a strong love and attatchment to another - one so strong that the two are one.
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Excellent!
Such an eloquent piece you've penned my dear friend, I love the flow, this song is beautiful, the lyrics and melody are truly divine...Thanks for sharing you, much love always to you and yours!
-Timothy
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I could almost hear this sung! "The Blower's Daughter" is so beautiful...I hear it everyday!
Uhm...it is overall pretty good...I mean I am so out of it today...Bad day for judging, ACK! But I hope you the best,
Buki
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Thank you!
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I couldn't listen to the Damien Rice song.... but it doesn't matter. This piece works well as a poem in it's own right. I like the simple way it says what you feel...... and seems to reflect my own emotions at the same time. Well done.
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Thanks, Sis! The first time I heard "The Blower's Daughter" was in a montage for Constantine Maroulis that one of his fans made. The video has scenes from the movie "Closer" (which wasn't very good) but I got to see who Damien Rice, the Irish singing sensation is. He's very popular due to his album "O" which went 'triple platinum' in Ireland before we heard it here in the US. I think the video is distracting..the song has more of an effect if you just listen to it. Hope Bruce fixes your computer so you can hear it!
Love Ya!
♥ Maureen
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Thank you, Sherry!
♥ Maureen
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excellent~
Love this one sis.... I tried to listen to the mp3 but Bruce must of done something so I couldn't hear the music
I agree this done have a haunting lilt about this poem...a little different than your usual poems but I loved it....
This poem is great and best of luck in the contest
Thanks for the link will try to get there today sometime
Hugs n love
Susan~~~
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Lovely Maureen,
I thought maybe this was to your hubby smiles. Reflects how much that special man can mean to us ladies well if we have one
LOL Great piece my friend. Sherry
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Wow! Thank you very much!
♥ Maureen
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i have to agree with hugh.the song is hauntingly beautiful but your words appeal to me much more.i think that they carry a bit more emotion and go a bit deeper.the right person would propell this to the same height of beauty as damien rice's song.my best to you in the contest.
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Dear Hugh,
Thank you..That is a Hug(h)e compliment! I really appreciate it!
Love and hugs,
♥ Maureen
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Dear Maureen,
Although it's not my usual 'cup of tea' I agree that "The Blower's Daughter" is haunting and beautiful but I prefer the words you have written. I especially like the "I can't not..." touch and the consistently explicit message of your poem.
Applause for what I consider a winning poem and best wishes for good luck in the contest.
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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