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It's Wonderful(Swap Quatrain)

You're always there, deep in my heart
Whether nearby or far apart
Providing me with love and care
Deep in my heart you're always there

You assuage fear, you bring me calm
Truly it's  a spiritual balm
It's earthly Heaven when you're near
You bring me calm, you assuage fear

It is a ball my life is great
For me there is no better fate
I feel that I am ten feet tall
My life is great, it is a ball.

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Written July 29th, 2005

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  • Frogzter gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Very positive and uplifting. A real pleasure to read and ponder! THanks for sharing and best wishes,

    Frogz~


  • Samplette gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Very nicely written. I enjoyed the read very much. Great form. Thank you for entering. This one is in other contests, but did not place..so is accepted.
    Sam


  • second-born
    April 1, 2008

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    wonderful indeed! you've chosen such a nice form and you've used it effortlessly...thank you for sharing this 'happy' piece!


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    July 18, 2007

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    Another fascinating form I've never tried before! Such lovely sentiments are expressed here, and I like the first two stanzas especially. Thanks so much for entering my contest!


  • xoxhanniexox
    May 12, 2007
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    Nice job! I like the repetition.

    Thanks for entering!


  • Zanark
    March 13, 2007
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    same here. flow was almost flawless.

  • BobbyJean
    January 6, 2007
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    That was very interesting, thx a lot and good luck! BJ


  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 13, 2006
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    Ooh I liked this! Though, it was a little short, but I loved the rhyming and everything! You expressed your feelings in very few lines, which is amazing! Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • LAPoe gold member
    February 2, 2006
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    Hey, I like the way you begin and end each quatrain with
    the same words only reversed... it's like a mirror image of
    itself..so unique..so sweet..so perfect...so like you...
    lapoe...


  • Lost-Pearls
    January 29, 2006
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    Ha! awesome job! I really enjoy the structure of this poem. Wonderfully written. Best of luck in my contest. Thank you For Entering!

  • UnVeilingtheSadness
    September 11, 2005
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    good rhymes im impressed
    xoxoxo-kazzie


  • Things Fall Apart
    September 11, 2005
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    Sweet poem! The ryhyming was wonderful! Good luck in the contest!
    -Charmer


  • WindsAngel
    July 30, 2005
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    *smiles* This was such a beautiful poem. Your flow and word choice were great and I have to agree with the first person who commented. It is so nice to find someone who is still happy and in love. Your rhyme was great and it was an all around wonderful poem.

    It is a ball my life is great
    For me there is no better fate
    I feel that I am ten feet tall
    My life is great, it is a ball.

    Great write, keep it up.

    ~WindsAngel~


  • Your Hine Us
    July 30, 2005
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    So nice to see someone in a good mood and still in love,that just dont happen not much any more,most of the time love has ripped a heart apart or worse,nice poem and I am glad your life is great .

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