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I Wish

If I had three wishes,
I wouldn't wish for fishes,
just for seeing Hilary duff,
Getting a mercede's car,
but not going to the bar.
My last wish would be getting a puppy just for me.
I hope I get at least one wish Yippee!

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#7 the three wishes one.
Written July 29th, 2005

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  • BrownEyedGirl87
    October 11, 2005
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    Nice try. I've read some of your other work too. Pretty boring stuff. Maybe try delving deeper into your thoughts and feelings. Everything you've written so far is pretty washed out and blah.


  • I Could Care Less
    September 6, 2005
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    nice poem! hope u get the last wish also hehe.. a puppy would be soooo cute.. i luv puppies n kitties.. hehe good job on this..

    peace,
    Sara


  • True Love Gal
    July 29, 2005
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    LoL, This was a cute poem but with this one. I would have put "but with my last wish, I would wish to be with you"
    Well, that's what I would have written...

    Great poem
    Good luck in the contest

    Jenn


  • forgotten dream
    July 29, 2005
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    this is a short, but light-hearted piece. it's always interesting to read what people would do if they had three wishes. best of luck in the contest <3