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My prison


                           Sitting here
                       glass hits the wall
                       Shattered like love
                       It's killing us all
                     Everything feels so fake
                      Everyone feels surreal
                         Pain building up
       Like the walls that confine me to this mental prison of mine

                          Hear that?
                  It's another knife in my back
                     Another cut goes deeper
                     When will it go to deep?
                   Another night goes sleepless
                    Will I ever rest in peace?

                      Another hurtful word
                      Another endless wall
                  Right around my barren heart
                       Will it ever fall?

                     You treated me like shit
                And the world just sat and watched
                       Bottle after bottle
                       Breaking in my flesh
                        Hitting the floor
                            My mess

                    In this penitentary I wait
                 For that wonderful day that I escape
                        I won't kill myself
                       That'll make me a coward
                           I won't runaway
                      You can't runaway from yourself

                 I'll just wait for the day you let me go
                        Unlock this dirty cage
                   Until then I'll just let you know
                        I'll never be the same

                  Although some wounds will never heal
                    Some suffering will still exist
           At least I'll get to feel my first ounce of happiness
          So with every breath I still take in this darkened cave
      You'll always hear these little words to haunt you as you sleep

                         NEVER REST IN PEACE

Author notes

It is very different. Comment if you like and comment if you dont. Bad comments are like constructive critiscism no matter how mean...they always make you strive to do better.
Written July 29th, 2005

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  • Beautiful-Mistake
    October 1, 2008

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    Great write. I like that idea that you are trapped in your own mind. You are a finalist in my contest. Good luck!


  • Bullet To The Head
    October 24, 2006
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    wow this was a great poem! the rhyming was great and flow as well!
    your stanza's didnt have the same amount of lines in them...intresting
    i could feel alot of hate and pain here...nice and dark how i like


    "Another hurtful word
    Another endless wall
    Right around my barren heart
    Will it ever fall?"
    this was my favorite stanza! i loved the imagry in this like you blockaded your heart!--lovely.

    thank you for taking the time to share your work with me and for your entry in my contest!
    take care and good luck
    ♥ Lynn


  • evie28
    July 29, 2005
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    Pfff what a good poem, I realy can feel your feelings flowing through this poem, this is worth to read, I realy like the first two lines of the last part : ''Although some wounds will never heal ,Some suffering will still exist '' <-- I just realy like how you expressed that! also you have chosen the correct title for this poem! Impressive work!! goooood job!!


  • MathiasThom
    July 29, 2005
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    excellent

    Great poem!I can read the alienation and pain with each word.