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Krishna (cinquain)

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Krishna
Narayana
Padmanaabhachyutha
Govardhana Giridhara
Hari

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Krishna
Lord of all men,
O lotus navelled one,
Lifter of mount Govardhana
Hari

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Author notes

The second piece as as exact a translation as I can get for the first Cinquain, in the form of a cinquain...

The cinquain is composed only of the different names of the Lord, which are translated in the second one.
Written July 29th, 2005

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  • estelm4
    July 30, 2005
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    um- Thats the part that isnt exact. 'Nara' is body, 'Ayana' is goal- so basically- the ultimate goal of all men is to be united with Him, the union of the souls, with the supreme soul. so- under pressure of making it sound right with the syllable count, it becomes "Lord of all men" since "Goal of all men" sounds a bit funny. I suppose "Lord of all souls" would be appropriate, but again, Lord of all men seemed better.

  • ankuraa
    July 30, 2005
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    Krishanaya thasmai namaha

    Kavn. Great!!!
    East meets west. Great going!!!!
    I didnt narayana meant 'Lord of all men'. Cool research Kavn.
    God bless you!

    Do read my poem transience...