Cascades twinkle brightly from the blue sky
Crystal droplets fall like tiny glass darts
As if each were a dream released to fly
Each a new hope in a million freed hearts
Together they plunge from heaven to earth
Every bead so perfectly made to shine
All a bit of ecstasy's buoyant mirth
And in their unity they are divine
The dancing drips of Paradise free-fall
At length they obtain their glorious end
Into a shadowy pool they all sprawl
Tangling within they head for life's next bend
The memory of their distinct beauty
Is now forgotten by all, except me
Author notes
(It's a waterfall, hehe)
Written July 29th, 2005
A contest entry
- Shakespearean Sonnets by LaBelle.
300 points, ended August 5, 2005, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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totally sweet... beautifulness... i was at niagra falls this summer... i think it was the only water fall i have seen in person in awhile... i so much liked the tangling within they head for life's next bend...
beautiful... talented you
-emily -
Ooh this is beautiful, I thought you were talking about snow until you said it was a waterfall. You didn't put what option you chose in your author's comments, unfortunately. I think it's pretty obvious, but it was still a rule.
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the magic of snow crystals
This was an excellent poem ,with genial metaphores and great scheme for each couplets ,and I did love the closing envoi,
which wrapped up the poem so well ..loved the imagery as well,
ecrivain01 is also a very helpfull critique ..good luck .
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good job
No volta, but otherwise, this is a gorgeous poem. I'm glad you didn't enter my contest on sonnets as I had a tough enough time picking the winners. I've had hated to have this one to contend with too. Anyway, this is indeed a great poem. -
This piece is really lovely. I love how you've captured the journey of each individual water drop rather than the rush of the masses of water. I also find it interesting that you used the word "mirth." -- I was considering using that word in my poem, but didn't want it to sound like a forced rhyme. lol You use it well.
Bravo.
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