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I'm nobody's monsoon of consummation

The closer you get to me
The uglier I become...

I'm a tropical thunderstorm.

But the more you get to know me
The less it matters.

My versatility only surfaces
When the atmosphere
Can mix our chemicals together
Onto the canvas
In a uncontaminated whirl.

Maybe by tomorrow
The clouds will part
And my eyes will reveal
The meadow of rainbows within.

Or maybe you see them already,
Because you looked to the sky yesterday
And prayed for rain.



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You do your part and I'll do mine and we'll both get what we're looking for without expecting fate to do it for us.
Written July 28th, 2005

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  • Kay Laon Anders
    August 11, 2006
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    Great Expression

    I have read your author page and have decided for myself that you are truely an individual. This write not only leaves me with a contrived sense of happiness but inspires me to be so.
    Great write and i am looking forward to reading more...

    KAY


  • MissStranger
    July 12, 2006
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    My words are useless...I cannot nor have the desire to comment upon this poem,for its absolutly FAULTLESS!!!

  • marrow
    July 29, 2005
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    "Or maybe you see them already,
    Because you looked to the sky yesterday
    And prayed for rain. "
    I am enthralled, and am in love with this.

    I am, shortly, comprising a list of my favorite pieces by my favorite writers.. I am surely predicting this will be on it.
    (Send me an IM soon.. I am heading out to Blockbusters later, and need some film advice.)
    - Justin


  • Blind-Ambition
    July 29, 2005
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    The words we were talking about seemed really random but I knew you'd use them in an imaginative and unique way, and you did. Excellent poem, I love it.

    My versatility only surfaces
    When the atmosphere
    Can mix our chemicals together
    Onto the canvas
    In a uncontaminated whirl.


  • Anthony-
    July 29, 2005
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    True mate. This is the way it works on so many levels. A real contemporary connection and discussion of love. Tony.


  • Claide
    July 28, 2005
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    Wow... Really really really like it. I'm really... wow. This was beautiful Greg.


  • A7X-4-Life
    July 28, 2005
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    This is a really good poem I really enjoyed it your a great writer keep on writing. Dont stop.
    Always,
    Brat

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