Deep down underground
There's a quality seldom found.
Down in that subterranean place.
Of light you will never find a trace.
Unless you use artificial means.
You will not be viewing any scenes.
So now I make my final remark.
In a coal mine it is very dark.
Author notes
I'm in a perverse mood tonight. I'm trying to obey all the rules to the letter.
Written July 28th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Two Verses Please about Darkness by kkatie55.
300 points, ended August 2, 2005, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks for the comment. My father was a Bevan Boy (wartime miner) and I have been down both Iron-stone and Tin mines as well as some kersplunking.
Jim -
Haha, this was awesome! When you said it was a dark poem, you were quite accurate about it! Hah, that rocks! I'm not sure if you know of someone who works in a mine but I think you've translated what they feel quite accurately. Very well done, keep on writing!
Commander -
Thanks for the comment Kastor.
I'm glad you managed to read the words with the deliberatly awkward colour scheme.
I'm not a fan of dark poetry but I do love to play around with words as you may have noticed.
Jim S -
This interpretation of the rules did not win you the contest but it made me laugh.
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Thanks for orgainising the concert that prompted it.
Jim S -
this is cute and delightful thanks for your poem
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Profound me! As someone once said I'm full of hidden shallows.
Jim S -
Good one! Funny and in its way a profound comment.
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the title of the contest is two verses about darkness. My poem is exactly two verses and the subject is darkness. Q.E.D.
Jim S -
WHATS THAT SUPOSE TO MEAN!!!!!!
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