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Looking Glass

Peer into the looking glass,
Be it bronze or steel or brass.
Gaze into the eyes of time;
a life in form of pantomime.

Spheres of wisdom, brown or blue,
Crystalline mothers of dew,
Behold the earth; grieve its pain;
Insubstantial and inane.

So look into the looking glass,
The storms that cloud those eyes.
Allow not the rain come to pass,
For when it does, the spirit dies.

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Written July 28th, 2005

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  • AngelEyes13
    March 3, 2008

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    Wow, short but I love it. "So look into the looking glass, the storms that cloud those eyes, allow not the rain come to pass, for when it does, the spirit dies." Those are my favorite lines. Wonderful job and thanks so much for entering my contest.


  • SilverInk
    August 16, 2005
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    Thank you!!! I appreciate the comments.


  • SierraHaven
    August 4, 2005
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    You are a very gifted 16 year old. Very Very gifted. I have only read a few things, but you seem like you have a bright future instore for you! good job.

  • TaintedInk
    August 4, 2005
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    I love this. Very nice write. As always.


  • SilverInk
    August 1, 2005
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    It's difficult to explain. I suppose it's like this: Look into the looking glass meaning, look into your own soul...look into yourself, your heart and such. A life in form of pantomime describes how one's life is usually hidden from others (You're "true" self). The second stanza generalizes how 'you' could be anyone because we all hide. Hence the "spheres of wisdom, brown or blue.' <--- The spheres meaning 'eyes' and brown or blue meaning the different colors of eyes (exact opposites). The 'dew' is the tears that those eyes give. And the last stanza is basically saying, look into yourself (or others), and "allow not the rain come to pass" as in, don't let yourself or others suffer. "For when it does, the spirit dies." That last part meaning, when others suffer, their spirit (joy) dies. Does that help DBury89??? lol

  • DBury89
    July 31, 2005
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    I like this poem a lot. Its very deep, and its also has a message. I myself am not sure exactly what that message is, but would love to know.

  • SilverInk
    July 31, 2005
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    Thanks and you're welcome


  • BattleOfBlood
    July 31, 2005
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    Wonderful ending, I loved it. Keep on writing, and thank you for commenting on my poem Say The Words.
    Blessed be,
    Lefay

  • SilverInk
    July 28, 2005
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    Thank you!

  • OurxBeginning
    July 28, 2005
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    Aaaw wonderful write, I love this sooooooooo much!!!! excellent job

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