lying through life,cheating death abismally,
living through death, confusing yourself,
and all around you, with your existence.
you'll tame the flames of hell with your tounge,
you spit evil, breath disease,or so you feel,
sing songs which make you slit your wrists,
think unclean thoughts which burden your dreams,
drown each sunny day with your tears of lonelyness,
there is no escape, you cannot flee your soul,
unless you speed your life clock,
and end this task unfulfilled,
take away your life, use your own hands
the voices continuously pester you,
you feel dirty, unclean,
the dirt which stains, never comes off,
you feel it is the only way,
spoiling their day,
they don't care, or so you think,
you may think it is better this way,
but drop the knife before its too late,
destroy the evidence, and the memories,
but time has taken its sorry toll,
you came unprepared, and so you leave the same way,
the blood stained carpet becomes your friend,
for it is the only one who stayed with you,
from the beginning to the bitter end
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Written July 28th, 2005
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thankyou for your lovely comments
looking back i do think i use a few too many commas lol thankee
xXzoXx -
Woven together with beauty and grace with great imagery. I loved it! It seemed like you really got into this poem, it seems very personal, I'm sorry that you feel so depressed, but keep your head up! Things are likely to get better! This was a great poem, very deep, so much hidden emotion. You did a fantastic job but I think you went a little crazy with the punctuation. You didn't need so many commas, but alas, it was still a great poem! Keep up the great work!!
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Cheers, it was on while i was writing this and fitted perfectly to my subject. Thank you it's kinda personal yeah, and they generally just means everybody, i feel so used and left out,un-noticed and non existent at the moment, as if i died,no one would care. but hey we all get days like that. thanx again hunni
love ya lots
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Chemical Romance? Thank you for the venom? Well adapted into poetry form, as per usual awsome imagery, you never fail to impress. Really deep..is it personal? If so, always here
by "they" do you mean parents? I know what you mean if so, the fuckers seem sometimes not to give a shit. I love this so much, keep it up,
Kate xxxxx -
thank you for your comments
xzoex -
That poem was nicely written.
The poem itself is very true to reality.
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