Walking,
along the road of constant strife.
Passing,
by the dreams that time forgot.
Beyond,
an innocent time I once held dear.
Towards,
a future, certainly uncertain.
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Written July 27th, 2005
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Enjoyable read
It is very good and simple and is loaded.
I like the style and the word use. it gives you time to pause and think.
It is true that our road in life is laden with constant strife , as this is inevitable, it is the way to our getting stronger in life anyone who says that they have not been through tough situation is lying.
We do forget dreams, probably we had some but never bordered or forget about executing them it is very true, but we can always try and achieve them if they are good ones.
The future is uncertain as we don't know what may happen tomorrow but as achristian with God on your side it is very certain ans dure - that is God is planning for you. -
hmmm. i like it. original, and i like the flow to it, as well. keep writing.
Rock On,
~~Nick~~ -
SUch and enjoyable write that hits right to the point, certainly it is one that can be realted to by most!The imagery within of going without a destinatin yet searching for something. I loved your piece.....thanks for sharing
ICULOOkn -
wonderfully simple, i like the pause that the form you chose creates between the first word of each line and the rest. it gave me the sensation of walking and being unsure as to whether or not you should turn back. "a future, certainly uncertain"-very nice
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i like this. it is very good. great job. love the wording and flow!keep it up!
x0x <3 Casey x0x -
Wow! I love the past to future thing you had there. I love your wording and I just love the poem. Very well done! Keep writing, you're very good.
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