Once was a girl who felt alone
Once was a girl who needed love
Once was a girl on her way home
Once was a boy who felt alone
Once was a boy who needed loved
Once was a boy on his way home
One day this girl tripped and fell to her death
The next day this boy does the same
Now they both are never alone
Now they are always loved
Now they are home sweet home.
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Written July 27th, 2005
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excellent
u kept it short and interesting. This is good. U are very creative. Keep it up -
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This is good, i mean, i can't rhyme like that and have it mean something. Too bad there isn't a contest you can enter this in, cause I think you would atleast get 1st or 2nd, 3rd even. I hope this isn't a true story, or based on one, or that would be very sad. But, it would be nice that they both found love. Great poem, again. -
Tnx for the comment on my poem 'I Remember'.
This is a great poem. I really liked it. Reach for the stars and never stop writting.
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This was a sweet write, loved it. keep up the great talent! xox
Candy Kiss
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O, that was cute. It was appealing, as well. I like how you set this one uo, it really gave us a sense of where your going and the end summed it up nicely.
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short....and wierd but lol yea good!why did you rejoin so you could talk to my friends like twiggy GET YOUR OWN FRIENDS!
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Nice write, I love it, short and sweet
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