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One passionate Night

 

Flickering candles, a single red rose;

 

Beautifully written words on paper in prose.

 

 

 

White linen tables set for desire,

 

Logs piled high for an intimate fire.


 

Smooth creamy skin shimmering in light,

 

Soft gentle music embracing the night.

 

 

 

Passions igniting a fire of pure bliss,

 

Lost in oblivion entrancing his kiss.

 

 

 

Wetness envelopes you as bodies entwine,

 

Taste is as succulent as a sweet glass of wine.

 

 

 

Fingers exploring caverns unknown,

 

Spine tingling quivers, soft muted moans.

 

 

 

Trembling bodies begin to explode,

 

Releasing the Love that’s yet to unfold.

 

 

Author notes

'My heart goes to the darkness'
Written July 27th, 2005

A contest entry

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  • sidewinder silver member
    September 29, 2005
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    thys words touch like butterfly kisses ...
    soft.... romantic...
    almost like a soft breeze whispering within a summer's night!
    I did enjoy this!
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


  • Touchof1der silver member
    August 23, 2005
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    I love this. There's really not a lot more to say but that. It's soft, sensual, sexy and very tastefully done. The imagery is superb. Good luck in the contest.
    ♥ Kimberly


  • HeavenScent4U
    August 8, 2005
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    Excellent

    Very sexy, sensual poem. You wrote this with a lot of class and that's not always an easy thing to do. So many adult poems just don't seem to be romantic and not tacky. Great job on this. Hope all is well in your corner of the world. Be Well and Be Blessed

  • Wolf-dog
    July 28, 2005
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    this was a very descriptive piece, and I think that except for the first stanza (I just found the rhythm a little of there), the rhyming is perfect, exquisite. This is very well done, a very nice piece. I'm glad I read it, it was just so real. It painted a picture in my mind that captures a reality few can describe as well as you did here. Well done.


  • Frozentearz
    July 27, 2005
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    ohh this is pure romance sensuous and sexy and all those good words, I do believe if this was in a contest of love
    You would win..
    Great job
    Tears


  • July 27, 2005
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    Awesome poem! Very sensuous and sexy.


  • DragonFyre
    July 27, 2005
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    Hey, you must be feeling better. Sexy, sesitive experience. As I would view you. It is an excellent poem.
    Edited on Jul 27, 3:22 p.m. because ''.


  • LaKitKat
    July 27, 2005
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    arousingly good

    Whoa there now, this is fantastic. I love this Sue, it shows true emotion and is very sensual with out being tacky. It was done with style and grace. I an not so sure I could write with such style, you make it look so easy.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kathy


  • Poet Raja
    July 27, 2005
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    Sensual Gem!!!

    Very passionate my freind and great imagery in thsi sensual beauty. Tastefully done with style and class, not an easy thign to do when you write an adult poem.

    Glad to see you are all smiles (I peeked at your author page and saw the pic!!! )



    Love and blessings from India - Joel -


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 27, 2005
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    Whew! STEAMY STUFF!

    Whew! Heated. Hot. and STEAMY. LOVED this. Wow. What a night.
    Excellent rhyme here and passionate flow.
    LOVELY ~Pam


  • evo-mx5
    July 27, 2005
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    A passionate night, indeed. And a very sensually written piece, Sue. The kind of night I long for from somebody...anybody (well, not just anybody)..

    I love this and I'm so glad to see something new..it's been a while..

    Mike

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