And you are like a lyric
I can sing it to you, sweet
Let pretty songs of love
Take you to sleep
And hold you there for me
And I will kiss you to infinity
But never on the lips
'Cause I don't have your heart
And you shouldn't do this
You might be missed
So leave it like it is
And come right back to lie
With me, and you stay cold and
I'll stay on my side
We'll find a compromise
'Cause I can promise
You the world; you wouldn't hold me to it
Hand it back still wrapped
Like you don't need it
You might need it if I leave...
Author notes
Just felt like posting since it's been such a long while. Expect more "Muse" in the future, I think.
Written July 27th, 2005
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Is there anything in particular that you didn't like about the ending? I thought it might be too vague.
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I like the sound of that. Thanks.
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Oh, sorry, just read your second comment. I'll add some background to the comments tomorrow, when I'm not sleepy.
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You're very generous. Thank you!
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Oh, it's just named that for a guy that I write about a lot. My best friend. The whole series is called "Muse." Not much to do with the poem itself, I agree.
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Intriguing. The first line sounds like it was a continuation from a previous piece, and I like that. I'm not so sure about the last line, though. Overall, it was a very nice piece, I enjoyed reading it.
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it is a rythmic emotion
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your piece is interesting and beautiful...absolutely loved it....especially the lines'Cause I can promise
You the world; you wouldn't hold me to it
Hand it back still wrapped
Like you don't need it
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Wow, I loved this, very emotional, and holds a meaning. Wonderful job, and keep up the great job.
~MxR
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i would love to know what you ment by the whole thing you should add that your comments i would love to read the THOUGHT behind this great write *huh*
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made me feel like you were realy talking to me ....THis seems personal in some way i enjoy this very much.
And you are like a lyric
I can sing it to you, sweet
Let pretty songs of love
Take you to sleep
And hold you there for me
Over all a great write.....
'Cause I can promise
You the world; you wouldn't hold me to it
Hand it back still wrapped
Like you don't need it.........I love this line. not being able to take the world from you ....this is breath takeing ....wow
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This is a beautiful poem that stresses compromise in this title MUSE PART FOUR.I admire the style and the presentation
of this poem .The flow combines with the rhythmn to describe
the ding dong nature of the conflict in this poem.GREAT JOB! -
Confusing
Not sure how this refers to a muse? It sounds to me more like a woman in your bed. But I suppose, if she's your muse, that's how it is. Was the hint in the title only? -
Of course! And also, mysterious.
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o_q = wow
Not sarcastic at all, but even if it was, it'd still be me. Am i rite? -
I can't decide whether that means I'm right.
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You are intuitive. o_q
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Interesting the way you did that. Reminds me of someone I know (that's not you, is it, Dan?). Anyway, thanks, I guess.
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Funky yet clunky, exudes hipstertude but a bit tacky like the khakis on Family Feud.
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Of the whole piece, I loved these lines best...would have been happy if there were only these:
"'Cause I can promise
You the world; you wouldn't hold me to it
Hand it back still wrapped
Like you don't need it"
Nicely done, I think. Evocative and fresh, despite the "done-to-death" theme.
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Many thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed!
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Beautiful piece! Its was full of lovie dovie stuff, The loss of a muse is actually a very good idea, the muse, apparently the insperation of men, is a strong figure within women! amazing piece again! keep it up!
~DFA~
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Nice piece. Perhaps a little sappy, but I liked it. I like the idea of fearing the loss of a muse through romance. Nicely done...
Cheers,
Yossarian
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