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Wanting

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First words form to me,
Like some kind of mellow being
Seducing every piece of me,
I find it so tempting

 

I open my eyes to her,
Try to revive my strength
Long nights of wishing bring,
Whispers of love in endless length

We glide upon the moon,
feeling the soothing breeze
Showing it our undying love,
In the moment we seized

Under the light of the coming sun,
We mesmerize, the others eyes
trying to find the key,
to our loves disguise

So until the time comes,
we mend the best we should
holding out for the right time,
when love is true, not misunderstood

Author notes

hahaha, I did it again! if you haven't noticed I wrote this love poem without the letter "A" Wow, i'm just moving right along..  hope you enjoy!

*~Ryan~*
Written July 26th, 2005

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  • Confused17
    April 2
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    That was so so so so beautiful.


  • hisaddiction
    March 29
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    this is beautiful....


  • Tzipora
    March 24

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    i really like that poem, the ending lines finish it oh so good like if u just read the last stanza it would been good enough. the story behind was greater

  • I absoutely loved it

    Great write Well it looks Like I found myself another awesome poet keep it up


  • pain5756
    March 11
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    hey i like this this is really good...


  • movedon
    May 17, 2008
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    i did enjoy and it was WOW!!!!!!
    loveeeeee it

    myleeeeeeeeeeeeee


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 3, 2007

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    Have never tried to write a poem with no a's but I think it would take some doing. Lovely flow to these lines - easy to read and understand as well.


  • Stingersinger53 gold member
    March 18, 2006
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    beautiful!! And I didn't notice no "A's" until I read your comment. Very well written!


  • kaibab silver member
    March 18, 2006
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    I loved this... Especially the wisdom to know that patience is what makes real love happen. The call to love and loving are easily misunderstood...but, when we do as you have said...we have a chance..Thanks for your poem.


  • September 22, 2005
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    Oh okay. so no 'a' I so noticed you didnt need to point it out. i do believe it was a brag. lol.. love poem number one from you that i have read and um.. yeah.. what can i say totally romantic. lol.. keep it up


  • lillianisevol
    September 13, 2005
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    beautiful

    I really liked this one ... very well written ... The end was rather suprising to me ... but still its a wonderful poem.


  • TheMadRag
    August 2, 2005
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    Very nicely done.


  • Gwenevere
    July 26, 2005
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    A lovely write.Once again the moon comes into her own,casting her magic to the wind.


  • July 26, 2005
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    Wonderful!!! Very lovingly written...I can feel the love story here...with the touch of reality mixed in.


  • -Darkest Desire-
    July 26, 2005
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    thats awesome..no 'a''s.lol..nice..lol.This was great, rreally enjoy your work.Well done.
    Alea


  • SsshVoices
    July 26, 2005
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    yes i love it thank you it is true we understand so little
    and yet can know so much. we just need to look less closely at the light and our vision will adjust to what really counts


  • A7X-4-Life
    July 26, 2005
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    I liked this very nicely written. You did a great job. Keep up the great work and awesome writes
    Always,
    Brat


  • Feyble
    July 26, 2005
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    WOW

    Beautiful.. It truley is

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