Nothing about this
making any sense.
The distance is
too great for either
to understand.
And yet love lives
in each heart.
Words spilling over,
unencumbered words.
Nobody knows, and
nobody cares.
Now-a-days, its
an everdyday thing
But to them, this
is something they
don't want, but both
have. Uncontrollably
in love, not understanding,
but believing, nontheless.
Its not something they
want to understand.
They just want to live
in the moment.
3,000 miles could break any
heart, but its just those
3,000 miles that brought them
together.
Author notes
Eh, just somehting I came up with. Really random.
Written July 26th, 2005
A contest entry
- Working Inside the Box by Luny Ben.
303 points, ended July 27, 2005, 7 entries
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This is an intersting poem but there is something about it, that makes one wonder about love. If they love each other, then the distance is nothing. If no body cares, then what is the reason behind getting married?
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i love it. i'm going thru a long distance relationship, and yeah it's hard. but i'm too in love with him to care. people keep telling me it won't work out, but i'm willing to keep with it until i find out whether it will or not. he's perfect for me, i'm perfect for him. why should i end that? very nice write, and oh so true!
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Good poem from the heart and I feel that it is well worthy of applause for the potiental it shows. Excellent effort.
Georges. -
holy crap liz this rocks my world... haha its really good !!!
later days
kayla -
When I was your age (I am 21 now) I had a long distance relationship (opposite coasts). I can really relate to his. Brought back a flood of sad memories. Beautifully expressed.
Both the beginning and the ending caught me. Of course, everyone says that the long distance things never work (and usually they don't), but at the time, love blinds you and makes you think that it is forever. Lovely piece.
Princess -
This was a great write very heart felt. Long distance realationships can be so hard not being able to see that person when you would like to knowing that if you are down there not there to pick you up. once again well done on this write and keep up the great work and best of luck in the contest.
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I think you're the first non-rhyming poem I've read in this contest. It all has a very nice story to it, or at least one that I can relate in some vague way. Good luck.
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*poke poke* >.> Me likes it *pokepoke* I got to go now, bye! *poke again*
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I think your title has a misspelling in it. ("Long distance LOVER?"). Overall, a very heartbreaking work. i especailly liked the resolution of the last stanza. Please feel free to read any/all poetry posted on this site by K-Dense (myself).-Curtis Meyer
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I like it, especially the irony in the last stanza. You're roght, this is something that is an everyday thing and becoming more common. You really captured the feeling of a long distance love relationship.
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