Logic
prevailing once again over the lies being fed
and proving the follies of free given trust
Actions
once again being shown to speak louder than words
and echoing again the torment I feel
Reason
no longer suppressed by lies and deceit
now scornfully viewing all it has crossed
no longer do the deceitful words of those once trusted
obscure the true, biting intent of their actions.
do they still think they can explain away what is plainly clear?
or has it reached the point that they no longer care
to deceive,
and mislead,
and lie.
the point at which they show outright the malice they feel,
instead of pretending they care.
whatever the case, logic and reason no longer shall fail
Author notes
OK, i wrote this at about 3 AM the night we left to go on the canoeing trip. I was really upset when I wrote this. Like all my other poems this portrays me when I'm upset and how everything seems 2 me. It's not the whole me...so yea...sry to all the people that may be mad that I only write when I'm upset and as such seem thats how I always am
Written July 25th, 2005
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Nice! To me, it looked like at first that you were giving definitions. Maybe that is what you were doing? Or, your own definitions that is. Besides that, I think that the only way you could make this flow better is to capitalize after periods, etc. "do they still think they can explain away what is plainly clear?" Thats one of my favorite lines. I know so many people who do this on a daily basis. To many extents, without any gain in life. Anyway, I agree with what Kate said, don't apologize for writting when your upset, or for what you write. You do not write for me, or Kisa, or any of your friends. You write for you, and you alone. So you can release the feelings you have down on paper, and help yourself. So, no more feeling guilty or bad because of what or when you write! Great job!
Cole' ♥
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Wow ben this is really good. I don't know what to say. If you need someone to talk to you know that I am here for you. And don't be sorry for what you write because you aren't supposed to write for other people only for yourself. And I defintly can relate with this write. Keep up the awesoe work ben!
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* applauds for a very long time * Aww benny boy this was so amazingly fantastic, I absolutely love it. You are so good with words and your feelings, and the form is so...spectacular. I am sorry for the way you felt when this was written, and for all the other times that you feel this way, but I will always be here for ya if you ever need me, and I will always try to make things better. You are an awesome person and an even better friend, so thank you. Love Rikku
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I'm glad I'm back to...its just not the same being away...I guess you can call me either...idk that much about what Megumi is like that much although i do think that I'm alot like Squall in terms of some of the perspectives he holds...so yea...
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awww Squall!...what do want me to call you Squall or Megumi? lol random i know...but this is a really good poem! i like the title don't change it! i love the way you arranged everything! and your word have such meaning! i'm so glad you're back ^-^
<3 Kisa
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