The Doc had suggested I take a break,
A spot of relaxation for my health's sake.
So I packed my kit and off I went
To spend some time in my one man tent.
I can't have been all that sober
Cos this was the middle of October
I arrived at the site and was given a pitch
And I put up my tent without any hitch.
So then, in that shady grove,
Feeling hungry I set up my stove.
But then I uttered words so crude,
I'd gone and forgotten to pack my food!
I had to trek three miles or more
'till I reached the door to the village store.
Then, following some financial revisions
I headed back with fresh provisions.
As I trudged back to my canvas room,
The sun went down and I was plunged into gloom.
So in the dark like little Red Riding Hood,
I made my way through the murky wood.
Then there cam a sound to make my breath stop.
Close behind I'd heard a distinct -- plop!
I looked around but I saw - nought.
Just the wind was my first thought.
I'd resumed my walk towards home ground
When I heard that self-same sound.
Quickly I stopped and wheeled
But nothing living was revealed.
I hurried on with faster pace
But still that sickly sound gave chase.
Whenever I looked naught could I see
Of the dreadful creature following me.
Though the intervals became a little longer
The noise I heard was growing stronger.
At last I reached the camp site gate
Without succumbing to any fearful fate.
But then I gave vent to a mighty oath.
I'd dropped every slice from my fresh cut loaf!
Author notes
I think you might have to delete this because it only just touches the supernatural. But I suppose bread is -the staff of life - so I'll consider it spiritual.
Written July 23rd, 2005
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You are welcome.
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Thanks for the lee-way.
Jim S -
Brilliant!...this poem I will allow but I see you have not place in your arthur's"I was here"and also who you commented on.But as I scanned through the previous lot I saw your comments on other poems so its not so bad.I will allow it this one time but please try to adhere to the rules next time.Good luck to you and have a blessed day.
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I have to say grummpy this is a good poem its kind of like one of mine hard to belive well belive it buddy cause it true but on the contrary it was good
~Rachel~ -
Thanks Jim. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Jim S -
Thanks Kevin I enjoyed the pun.
Jim S -
This was a camp out nightmare. LoL... I think as long as the beer was in the tent I'd be fine. Good rhyme, rythym and flow. Good story. Jim
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Really enjoyed this, though it is a bit disillusioning! A good laugh.
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Thanks Anemone. It's amazing what I write in pubs even though I'm only drinking orange squash (yes, really).
The music and friendly chat makes me reach for a pen.
Jim S -
The coloring of this is very clever, for one. Great word choice. You have a gift with rhyming. Good luck in the contest.
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