Her garments are tattered and her feet are bare.
But there is a grace and a quiet dignity in her that other angels envy.
She gave up her beautiful shimmery wings for me long ago.
Instead she floats.
Her halo was sold a few years ago to save my soul.
Yet her head is still held high.
Her features are plain.
Until she smiles and then the beauty within shines through.
She never had been thin.
But that means more of her to hug.
Her heart is as big as the sky.
I once saw her cry.
She is brave when I can not be.
When I can't sleep she sings to me.
She protects me from the monsters and not just the ones under my bed.
She is Grace... my guardian angel.
Author notes
Angels are always portrayed as perfect beings. Well my guardain angel wouldn't be perfect. But she would be mine.
Written July 23rd, 2005
A contest entry
- Angels and Faeries! by d a f f o d i l.
300 points, ended July 24, 2005, 6 entries
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thank you for reading my poem God's Grace.
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Great job !!!! Keep writing !!!
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I like how you went beyond the stereotype of an angel. I thought the poem was going to be something different by the title, but the title does fit the content. Your angel does embody grace, for grace requires sacrifice and humility.
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I liked both versions as well, both were really really good but i preferred the first one. Great poem for one that came off the top of your head!
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I didn't even realize it rhymed now. lol. hmmm..you maybe right that it detracts from the over all picture. I liked both versions, I just wrote the first version off the top of my head and thought it wasn't finished and when I came back to it this is what came out of my head.
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Great
Hmmm, it still has a very elegant ring to it but the only thing is how you change it from being a free verse to a rhyming poem. Its kind of distracting, its still great though
But it kind of detracts from the over all picture. I like what you are saying though and how you go against the stereotype of an angel. I think its an excellent poem. Good job.
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Sure. It's this one isn't it?
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hi! I altered my angel poem. Will you be willing to read it again and tell we what you think?
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hi i altered my angel poem. Will you be willing to read it again and tell me what you think?
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Very pretty, keep up the good good writing.
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i very beautiful insight to how people stereotype the concept of angels...well done and good luck xxxxxxxxx
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